nice

good

good story

good story

Ive read this story about 4 times and each time I read it I say. Man I want to be this good of a writer one day.

please update i want to find out what happens next

Please keep writing this story. Pretty please.

M'kay. Firstly, this IS good. It made me smile but there are some things I really want to advise you on. I dont wanna offend you so take it as constructive critisism...
1. Even though its good, the sudden transition between enemies and gf's seems a little sudden. You would expect them to be doubtful, nervous and if they truly loved each other, ffar far FAR more excited.
2. Toris sudden change in attitude from suicidal to perfectly and boringly fine seems really unrealistic and could be far more developed. Try describing their feelings more to help with this and my first point. It also tends to help (as i have noticed in other fics) to have it in one persons POV. This adds far more emotion, and far more mystery as the other persons feelings are unknown.
3. Finally, BE MORE FREAKIN EMOTIVE. Sorry but it was killing me. When a really brilliant fic is imagined the reader feels what they feel, their hearts are torn apart, they feel so much confusion but so much understanding. They feel WITH the characters torments but all of this is because the are paragraphs of writing describing the smallest of feelings, a huge range of vocabulary, and an artistry and passion to the story, woven in by the author. Im sorry to say i felt basically nothing when i read this. It seemed bland, blank almost, the lack of correct punctuation, somtimes grammar, the mix of abbreviations mixed with precisley correct dialouge, and the (sorry) lack of overall creativity killed what i truly think could actually be a great story.
Im sorry, i sound like a bitch but i love stories that have passion, yknow? Try reading some longer books by legendary autors such as Phillip Pullman, Terry Pratchett and Jaqueline Wilson. All of these have an ingenious knack of writing with beauty, stregnth, love, passion, and they weave an irreplaceable web of emotion.
I would really reccommend reading as much as posdible from classic authors like these to make any future fics you could write truly amazing.
Again, im sorry for sounding like a judgemental bitch, i just want to help :)

Surprises from Jade for Tori, I love those surprises, they're so cute, so Jade and Tori are xD.

really cute

Short but ever so good update again soon.

Like so far!

good chapter

kind of funny, you do know lynyrd skynyrd isn't metal right? lynard skynard is southern rock

anyway, enjoyed the chapter like them spending time together

Tori the ever so loyal girlfriend good chapter seemed a bit short..up date soon

I loved when Tori turned down that lady