It's very unusual that you have written in 2nd-person, but I like it. Good so far.

well, it was a really nice start to the story, but the second person point of view makes it nearly impossible to read.

i'm sorry, the story looked interesting but the POV style was too confusing. Please change

I honestly tried to read this, but the second person pov writing style is too distracting that I found myself reading it with an editing mind set instead of an entertainment mind set. Second person point of view is considered by most to be bad for writing fiction for this very reason.

this is probably a good story but I hate the second person prospective.

As you head back to bed, you can't help wondering if Professor Dumbledore is quite normal. Who wants socks for Christmas? Then again, he is supposed to be the greatest wizard of the age; how could someone that good not be normal?

read a story where the mirrow was a lecagency, and dombordor could block people reading his mind.

ur fan fics nice..but are u gonna copy - paste all d time frm the movie ?

The POV of this story makes it impossible for me to read past the first chapter, which is a shame because I think I would've liked this.

"As you read this chapter, you realize that you wasted your time rewriting the exact same story in a stupid POV."

This is actually quite awful of me, but I often don't review a story more than once. Given that I have written my own work on here and I understand just how nice it is to receive reviews, I really should return the favour to others. Since your story has so few reviews, I figured that I would go ahead and give you another.

First, one thing I've noticed is that after I changed my story from a Harry P. story to a Harry/Daphne story, a ton more people started viewing it (viewing increased by an order of magnitude). I think that's just because of the sorting options that are available on the site. So I would recommend choosing a major character and putting that as your second person. You can always change it later.

Second, the story is certainly well written, though I admit that the second person POV is still taking some getting used to. The biggest problem is just how little it has deviated from canon so far. For example, the troll was defeated in the same manner as in the book and it hasn't seemed to make too much of a difference in many ways that Harry, Ron, and Hermione are all in different houses.

I realize that it's hard striking a balance between setting the foundation for later changes and the story as a whole, and getting to the good parts where things change (and too many fanfiction writers just jump into a sudden change that's so hard to believe, it undermines the entire story). The best advice I can offer is to focus mainly on where things deviate from canon. If that means book one is only five chapters and 15k words, so be it. You'll cover the important parts and the reader can fill in the gaps with canon material, and then you'll both get to the fun parts faster. Remember that many of us have a far too short attention span. :)

Best of luck!

- insomniac17

Please, do not force us to read each chapter in the book one of Harry Potter again. Most of us have read it or watched the movie in the past and are not really interested in rehash the events on Harry Potter and the Sorcerer's Stone for second or third time. Include the scenes from the books ONLY when you have introduced any change on them. When incurring in canon twists, if you like. It's very bore read the same old thing again and again! Give us a brief of all it and continue onwards. Said that, your Harry is an interesting character even if not so different from JKR's Harry Potter in regards to personality and attitude. I liked your in deep study of the Dursleys in this chapter, however. Canon twist, see? That was different and enjoyable. I like character study very much! I do not think I am going to read more of your story because it seems to be not very original so far. All is so like it was in the book and the movie! But your writting is good and there are little grammatical errors that I saw, so your effort is much better than others I have read in the past! Sorry if my review takes you down. I think you are a good enough writer but you should introduce some original twists in your plots to make them liveliest and interesting. Thanks for share your work with us all anyhow!

I read about 3 lines into the first chapter and after reading the other reviews I agree with them. Change the POV to third person because this is horrible.

I had hoped to see that this story might be a new slant on Harry Potter, all I see is someone changing a few words here and there but retyping the books.

The second person perspective makes this story impossible to read.

sorry.. but the POV of this story makes the fic unbearable to read for me..

Well, this is certainly interesting. I'm eager to see how this Harry deals with the canon story, or how it diverges later on.

There are a few things I noticed, though. You seem to have mixed up a few words. Coarse instead of course, role instead of roll, and things like that. There were a couple of spelling mistakes, and I noticed a capitalization error. Overall, very minor things but things that you should hopefully pick up on by rereading the chapter once more.

I was also very surprised by the second person point of view. I have yet to read any story on here that is told from that perspective, and it was slightly jarring at first. That's not to say its bad; it is actually quite an interesting way to tell a story, and I'm interested to see what you do with it.

Other than that, there were a couple of parts that were rather awkward to read, but they were not too common. On the whole, I think this is as good as can be expected from something with only minor changes from canon (which is to say, solid with tantalizing hints at what is to come). I look forward to reading more.