Amazing!

Paragraphs are still way too long and the class scenes are incredibly boring. 5 chapters in and she still hasn't run into Paul or Sam, nor do they know she's back. La Push is a small reservation. Gossip about her would spread really fast, and the council would be aware of her return, especially since she's descended from a shifter bloodline. Even if she changed her last name, she would easily be recognized, and word would get to the pack about her right away. But seriously, your classroom scenes are actually awful. It also makes no sense that it took her 5 years to get a teaching degree just to come back to La Push and teach high school, despite how badly she wanted to leave and how much she wants to avoid everyone she used to know. Again, impossible to do in a tiny freaking town. Too many plot holes. Needs a lot of work.

Your paragraphs are too long. You need to break them up. It's hard on the eyes. Also, you're spending way too much time on the students instead of the actual story. Her job should be second to the story, not the main focus with everything else coming second. Nobody wants to read about her being a teacher, readers want the action that comes with the supernatural elements to be the main focus.

Way too much time spent on the students and their personal lives.

Not sure, but if Sam and Paul were purposefully cruel to make Bella go to college or something, then that was an awful way to do it. I can't see Sam saying such horrible things either, he was always a really honourable character. He would have broken up with her firmly, but never tell her she was just a good lay. Why Bella would ever move back to La Push after that makes no sense either, no matter if she wants to improve life for the natives. She could help people anywhere without the risk of facing her past, which she'll obviously never be able to do on a tiny reservation. She no longer has any ties there aside from growing up there. That's a pretty big plot hole.

Also, Sam wasn't friends with Paul until Paul joined the pack...

I read your story a while ago and have been looking for it. I am so glad that I found it again! It is wonderful and can't believe that you don't have more reviews. Your story is so different and deserves more attention. I love the fact that your Bella is Paul's sister and Esme was the "bad vampire". Such a different take and a great story of a strong Bella. Thank you.

great story

Edward ?

Is kimball hurt by the kiss? Ms. Hale?

They are shape shifters not werewolves. Can't they and the cullens be friends?

Wow this story has been so amazing! thank you for sharing!

the elders are idiots

the elders screwed up: Sam had had imprinted before if he could see Bella. Now He imprints years later and it will be difficult for him to justify his actions to her.

So what happened did both of those ass hate turn into mutts and thought that was the best way of handling their relationship with her by being assholes to her?

Bellas job is worthless. Telling those stupid fairy tales? Bitch please lol