this is cute

Such a cute story about the little ginger twins trying to be responsible in anticipation of their birthday.
Arthur its the most even-tempered, loving father. No wonder JK couldn't kill him.
Some clever foreshadowing of things that would be significant to the boys as they got older. Their almost-perfect aim would make them good beaters and George was hit by a marble in his ear. Was it the same one that he would later lose?
I like Arthur's reflections on how each of his sons had learned about their magical abilities and that all of his children were brilliant.
The line about the dresser having previously sat under the clock was good, because it told early that there was a reason for it not to be in place. I thought that it had been shoved into the closet, but being part of the splinters is better.
So they had blown up their furniture and tried to clean up the mess.
And they learned that pranks were really...brilliant.

Ahhh I love the logic that since it fit in the closet, it must be considered cleaned up. With as many kids as Molly has, I’d totally let that go, too.

Fred wanting a dragon is beyond perfect.

I must’ve missed something- what happened to his bed that he no longer has one? Ah, I assume that’s what that pile of wood in the corner is.

Hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha. “You’re mum’s not mad…” My dad has said similar things before as my mother pitched a fit over something insignificant, so I can really relate to this moment right here.
I like the inclusion of a Muggle delivery method from a magical place. It makes sense they would have that so that people could buy for nonmagical family members and parents and such.

“Let’s be responsible!” Oh goodness, what are they going to do now.

I had forgotten their birthday is on April 1! I love that. I love how you used that and I loved the story. It flowed well and was very well-written.
Some notes:
The sentence “Dad had promised he’d get more…” is a bit of a run on and a bit awk. Maybe you could reword it?

Also, so if they put the wand back and are so worried about it being back, then I assumed their mom hadn’t figured it out yet either. And wouldn’t she have been able to repair their beds with reparo if she knew? But it seems she knows and that’s why they’re in trouble… so we have missed that part already. Anyway, if they’re already in trouble, I wouldn’t see them fretting over a wand earlier since they can’t really get into more trouble (obviously it could only have been Bill’s wand that they all used). So that part just doesn’t make sense to me.

Hmmm magical pictures move even if non-magical people look at them, same goes for action figures. Unless you mean Charlie animated the figures himself?

This is absolutely adorable! I personally love Fred and George, as well as anything with them in it.

Firstly, them waiting, and waiting and how they're so precise, you put a picture of the twins counting down the seconds in my head, and it's so cute!

Their little obsession with the word 'Brilliant' is, well, brilliant! I can just see two little red headed boys shouting it to each other. The scene with Ginny had me giggling, really every scene with her had me giggling.

And their birthday is none other than April Fools, that's the perfect date for those two! I'd be a tad fretful if I were their parents, because then they could get away with all the pranks they wanted to!

I like the way the narrative is written, but sometimes it draws me out of the story. That's all I really have to say on the matter of concrit.

Overall, this was great and I had me hysterically laughing at some points because you conveyed the character's so realistically.

I have always adored the twins, so I had to choose this story!

Fred counting down the seconds is adorable. I can picture a little red-haired boy impatiently tapping them away with his foot. LOLOL at the mention of whipped cream cans. I'm surprised Arthur didn't think better than to bring one of those into his house with Fred and George living there.

Your telling of them waiting...and waiting...and WAITING is hilarious. ANY going-on-six year old would find it hard to sit still and be quiet for an hour or so...but I'm surprised Fred and George are pulling it off :snicker: The little tussle and then the fuss over the splinter George ended up with is sweet.

And here comes the rest of the family, hehe. Their dialogue is so cute and very in character, especially Ginny wailing that two is not a baby and Bill's response. (I'm ignoring Percy :P)

New furniture...hmm, I'm guessing by the look on Arthur's face that it's a bunk bed set.

["Let's go be responsible!"] - ...now why do I have the feeling this will not end well? :P

Now I thought that the boys would end up in a whipped cream fight, but you fooled me, and what resulted is soooo much funnier, lmao. And they're so perplexed that no one got mad at them, LOL.

["You mean we get to make messes and blow up furniture on our birthday and everyone thinks it's funny?" "Brilliant!"] - :snickersnort: Brilliant ending! This was such a fun read!

Why is it whenever I pick a story on your profile, I end up laughing hysterically by the course, this was about Fred and George and it wasn't an angst one so, by virtue of those factors, it means I must end up almost crying my enjoyment.

I think I'm going to get the word "brilliant" (naturally spoken in high-pitched versions of James and Oliver Phelps) stuck in my head because of how much fun the twins had whenever they said it. They really were a bunch of precocious little twats, weren't they? I love the characterization of the twins, though I do believe I just love the twins. They're funny, arrogant, and naturally focused on dragons as all children should be at the ripe old age of six. And also responsible. Yus

The way you incorporate all of the family in their own way, even if not present, is great. Even Percy, who is generally difficult for me to enjoy, is hard not to giggle at with his huffy feelings towards his brothers and their inevitably fun antics.

The prank with Ginny and the whipped cream... oh that was gold. I know Mr. Weasley would do that... buy Muggle whipped cream... with his family around. Hahaha. At least they didn't touch the cake.

I do believe it was a good thing Molly wasn't there. She would have heard her sons and promptly had a heart attack an then we wouldn't have had the wonderful death of Bellatrix in book 7. But thankfully it didn't happen.

The accidental magic was hilarious. Oh look, the furniture exploded. Did you have any ideas of how Ron and Ginny's magic came up? I'm not sure it was mentioned in the books.

This was really great and a fun read. I think there was a SPaG error but I think that may have just been me. Thank you for this.

The Weasleys are my favorite HP family so I really enjoyed reading this. You truly get into the minds of both boys without making them sound too grown up. The progression throughout the whole day- from them "cleaning" their room and trying to act more responsibly, then destroying the kitchen- was adorable, and I could actually picture the whole family running around the Burrow. I love the fact that the whole house doted on the two boys and the way you stayed true to each of the characters (especially Arthur when he looks at the furniture invoice). The banter between all the twins and Arthur when he was unpacking their new furniture was very well done.

Ginny was too cute, and I love the way you used repetition ("I'm not a baby"). The picture of both twins and Ginny smeared in melting whipped cream made me smile. The ending was especially sweet, with the little "Brilliant!" after they discovered their birthday was April Fools. Great job writing this with such warmth, it was a pleasure to read!

Dear pixile,

This is a beautiful story about young Fred and George and how they eventually become the pranksters we know and love. The characters' personalities are solid and it definitely feels like watching them in a windowsill as we see a little picture of their life together.

I absolutely loved it. And the "Brilliant!" was the perfect way to end this story.

Aw, that was quite cute. Fred & George are awesome characters and imagining them when they were little is a lot of fun. But now that they know they can get away with pranks on their birthday & not be punished, who knows what the heck would happen? XD

Very good read. Congrats!

Ohhhhkay. My lord god of whatever origin, this was utterly adorable. XD just priceless, perfect analysis of what it's like to be a six year old and to be a kid with a looming birthday. I loved the whole Weasley clan despite my knowledge being limited to the movies, and their whole dynamic was just lovely. Fred and George, absolutely loved them. The whole thing was written well and the ending? Priceless! This was a great read for the day before my own birthday (party, actual thing is on the 17th) with a sweet dose of childhood throwback and lovely memories that aren't even mine until I think about it. Thank you!

Fun read! The kid's-eye-view perspective is well done: It doesn't feel forced, and it doesn't feel overwritten. You slip perspectives well, and it doesn't feel like head-jumping. I didn't see any problems in clarity, per your question, and I think this may be due to the perspective: Since it's so young, it's clear as a matter of course. I'll also check out ch. 2 of the multichap Mary Sue, soon, and see whether I can provide more help there.

The whipped cream scene didn't feel rushed, but I think perhaps the "more" comments come due to the placement in the story more than the length. It's about 4/5ths of the way through the story, and it feels like it should be earlier, for a more natural arc - 2/3rds, say. You can get there by lengthening, which I wouldn't necessarily recommend, or you can cut other bits that might not be necessary. I think, for instance, the business with the splinter at the start doesn't need to be QUITE as long as it is. It's good and there's nothing wrong with it, but it doesn't drive any of the later action forward.

He'd been told by the store manager that the instructions were originally written by Nordic Elves. Obviously something had been lost in the translation. - made me chuckle.

Besides, if the baby exploded while he was in charge, he'd never get a baby dragon. - So did this.

Hope the thoughts were helpful!

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He and George - George and he

that said "Shake well before opening". - assuming you're not American, since you spell 'litre' thus. If you are American, punctuation before ending quotation.

Seconds were tricky, he thought, as the marble

Thanks, Dad!

That's right, Ginny, and I'm...

Ten-year warranty!

It's your new bed, boys (whenever someone's spoken to in dialogue, separate with commas)

Shakey, shakey!

three-litre

Fred and George stared forlornly after their brothers and dad after they left to go outside. - 'They' is unclear. Who has left? Fred and George, or brothers and dad?

swish, swish in the background

Look, George!

only six year old boys could make

This is sweet! Love it!
Fred and George were brilliant, but I think my absolute favorite was Ginny. She's just adorable!
Good job with characters and such, you did brilliantly! Wonderful job, dear!

Awwwwhhhh. This sets the perfect mood for childish wonder and feels slightly nostalgic, too. I commend you for having achieved such a feeling of insouciance and easy dialogue between the characters. Seeing Fred and George as kids is so adorable, and this is heartbreaking in a way because we all know what happened to them...

Anyway, this is so unspeakably adorable. I laughed so many times despite really disliking kids. I think it's that innocence there that endears them to me. C:

Good work!

This made for a lot of laughs on my part. Those twins are complete trouble makers aren't they?

I loved this story! For the sheer brilliance and awesome characterisation of the Weasley family. Going into territory that I never ever really seen in an HP fanfiction. Those twins were troublemakes at a young age and I like how you set the stage for when they are much older.

I only saw one mistake in this story. I don't know if it is supposed to be deliberate for the story in question or if you overlooked it but I will like to bring your attention to it as it didn't make much sense to me.

The "Mistake" if you'd like to call it that is when Percy and the twins begin heading out of the room... "The brothers three sulked as they left the room."

Perhaps this was deliberate as we see this type of talk in a few of the books we read so perhaps it isn't a mistake at all.

I really loved this story! Despite it being finished and all, it is being added to my favourites. I really loved how those two twins get in trouble no matter what! As for their birthday on April first, I think that this really sets the stage for their personalities later on. They are the constant trouble makers and that is what I love about those two!

Great job once again! You should write more for the Weasley twins!

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Heh, I gotta say this was flat out adorable...then again, I'm always a sucker for stories about little kids :P It definitely put a smile on my face. Good work!