This is pretty hood I can't wait to read how you've redone the other chapters I CANT BELIEVE THERE'S SOMEONE OUT THERE WHO KNOWS THE REAL NAME OF THE RING WRATHES EVERYONE I KNOW THINKS THE WITCH KING WAS TALKING ABOUT THE WINGED BEAST AND NOT SPEAKING IN THIRD PERSON

Muito boa, escreva mais. Abraços

Wow this is an interesting story u got here lol. Update soon I wnt more:)

Oh, Seras is a huge nerd. Love it. She was acting so carefree and teenagery with rocking out to that music. Always need more of that kind of Seras in this dark fandom. And those poor horses! They have such horrible riders...

I love this chapter XD
"Dorkulina" people should use this term more.

Also the last paragraph with the mare reconsidering ditching it's rider was the best ending to this chapter you could have written. XD
Happy writing!

That was awesome! Hilarious, really! Alucard forced into a dreamscape LOTR dream with Seras! Too funny!

B reading U!

Já estou ansiosa pelo próximo capítulo, escreva mais, estou adorando . Abraços

Estou amando ler sua fic e espero que escreva mais sobre este casal. Abraços

Vast improvement Please continue soon. Amazing storyline. Cant wait to see Integra/Seras and Alucard's twisted punishment.

i honestly can't remember if i saw the original version of this or not but as far as this first (new) chapter goes, I like what you have! i'm really looking forward to reading whatever you have coming for this fic! I honestly laughed a little when Walter started calling seras a "foxy knockout," i don't know why i just get the giggles thinking about friggin prim and proper walter trying to say that.

A note i'd like leave to help you improve is to maybe have someone proof-read for you (like a beta or anyone who can give you feedback just after you've finished writing) because most of the grammar errors I saw may have been simply overlooked or unseen. As the writer, you know what it's supposed to say, and that's what you see, but that may not be what's on the page (happens to everyone i promise). For example, I counted at least two instances when you used the word 'pledged' when i think you meant 'plagued' - a pledge is a promise or oath, a plague is something that constantly bothers or causes issue. "He pledged never to force himself on her; though many naughty fantasies plagued his waking hours."

Okay, so you've obviously improved with your writing. It flows better! And you seem to have a better grasp on the characters as well. You've captured Alucard's stern and yet tender feelings for Seras nicely in the bedroom scene. I'm eagerly waiting for chapter 2 now. I'm also really happy this fic is getting your attention. I thought it was another awesome story being left unfinished and abandoned. That would have been a shame.

Oh my gosh plz make more!

Walter you sly dog

Omg that made me so wet, good job. I love the foreign language

and here I sit, in love with a story.