Jaodre.

Pauvre sasuke et encore kakashi est vraiment bête car il connait la vue des jinrinki et il est naif et encore Naruto le sauve .

Jaimerais répondre à l'invité qui a mis son commentaire avant celui la tu est bête et naïf car naruto il a un cote sombre qui d'ailleurs combat mais cela veut dire quil a eu une enfance pas rose .
J'avais demandé à un mec qui avait lu et qui lit tjs le mange de savoir si en canon, cad dans le manga papier, on voyait son enfance et la réponse et non, ceci est un fait et tu oublie la mission avec lequipe 7 de zabuza et haku ou naruto dit à tous le monde ce qu'était sa vie et kakashi confirme en disant que cest en gros emrombe de chocolat.
Donc dans un monde où naruto se réveille de son masque car il porte un masque qui est d'ailleurs confirmé dans le mange avec yami naruto donc cest toi qui est nul.

L'auteur se spécialise dans ce genre d'histoire pourtant tu lis son histoire es-tu masochot ou complètement idiot cela reste a voir.
Mais vu que tu n'est pas inscrit tu ne risque rien ou plutôt que tu est un lache.

"Garbage chapter 4 . Nov 25, 2015
Seriously? This is fucking terrible. You clearly honor jack-shit about the Naruto-verse so why the hell are you trying to write for it? Every single character in this story was OOC and your Naruto was a douchey Gary-Stu.

On top of the absolutely atrocious characters, there was virtually not a single thing that could be labeled as "well written", seeing as your literacy is absolute garbage. All this story is, is a large wish-fulfillment sack of shit for people that have the mental compacity of a gerbil and don't know anything about Naruto outside of the shitty stories they've read on Fanfiction.

It's not even just this story. You literally keep perpetuating the same shit over and over and raking in the praise that you don't even deserve. Every single person that says your writing is anything other than complete shit is a fucking idiot that knows nothing about literature.

Most of the time your stories double to reinforce how misogynistic you are. Seriously, try writing a story that treats the people Naruto is paired with as something other than a basic sex toy. You truly are pathetic.

Your ability to develop an actual plot is virtually non-existent too. All of your stories have fanon shit as a base and then get covered in how much of a badass you think Naruto is and how he should hate Konoha. Honestly? Grow the fuck up you little shit. Have you even read/watched Naruto even once in your miserable life? Naruto's childhood wasn't even that bad. He was NEVER physically harmed. He NEVER had people calling him a demon. He never had people trying to kill him.

Your lack of knowledge in regards to the Naruto series truly makes me question just why the fuck you're even writing for it? You clearly don't like anything about it since you change his past entirely, end even then you don't seem to like that as you still make him hate Konoha.

All I can really say now is that you are a fucking idiot that needs to research the shit you write about. You truly do suck shit at writing. In this chapter alone there were over 10 different atrociously written run-on sentences. VFSNAKE you receive so much praise from idiots. Stop listening to them and start improving your damn writing." ~ "Garbage chapter 4. Nov 25, 2015

You know, he's right. All you do is retread the same ground over and over again, VFSNAKE. All the people on this site are nothing more than yes-men willing to bow to you under the whims when you give them the wish-fulfillment they desire. Many good writers on this site may have their cliches, but when they deliver on quality writing, they get no reviews, no praise, and many of them are just scraping by while being unmotivated and unrecognized to write because of people like you that cater to the masses. When the real good writers are gone and this site has every cliche in the book with nothing new, I know people here will still eat garbage over real food.

It was an amazing story can't wait for more :-D

Chapter 3: informing the hokage of the boy potential, not boys potential.

This is an amazing story

BAD ASS !

i havent even started this but damn these reviews, no ones forcing this down ya throat, theres no need to vent so heavy. or be so wierd, the nigga under me is on something else

when before get his god mother Naruto had get to a cell when the sands kids had stay in when then he had seeing her now sleeping in bed and when walking in now and get her up now and then saying to down now gril you my now my lover now and both had sex now and feeling on her now and then saying to a woman like you here made me mad and now are in power we will show them why it is not cool , when think of it now , she ask why now my lord and lover ,we took over soon gril , when doing it now west the last of it now siting in his new house warlord queen Sammy who get took out and her crown now it his feet now and Naruto with big hands put on now and feeling it now a blue one and saying her you house lands and money now my , when in the bed room now he sleeping with his wife now ion now , feeling on her now saying to her think you my gril she seeing his muslces get big so much up now , her in her clothers be took off and saying i well be happy for you kill my mom and dad and now with the money all the gold now i get form my fools in my clan now are my , ho now you my now , ion yes Naruto , my lord and lover , when she was out sleeping now , he sill think back when he took out his ex tame met and when doing it he took out the fool sol out and putting into his own body now and seeing it powers and eyes now are my , he then seeing sakrura now his lover and sex slave now ,

You know it's not the best around, but hell this type of novel is a guilty pleasure of mine.

For me, I see this as a quickie story. The pacing and tone are all over the place in this chapter. It's not enough to make someone not want to read it but it feels like your jumping around to a ridiculous extent for no reason at all.

Why do you even like Suigetsu? He seems like a cocky little shit who chokes on balls while getting buggered by his father.

I can see you really like Kimimaro. Why? Is it because he was an evil tool? Or is it because he's your way of justifying your "philosophical" bullshit. In most of your stories, you try to justify the callously evil actions of your protagonist. You make the villains the "good guys". Yet you vilify the other characters in your story ho do the same thing. If I had one word to describe you, it would be "hypocrite".

I think you try to do this for multiple reasons.
1) You are an asshole who tries to paint himself as "misunderstood" when really, you're just simply an asshole. You use philosophical and logical gymnastics to justify your own bullshit. You say your bad actions and character is because of your past, or therefore must be understood and sympathized with. The flaw with that is, bad actions are still bad actions. The path to hell is paved with good intentions. Hitler had a rough childhood. Pol Pot did. Many evil people in history had horrible childhoods. Ranging from rapist to murderers. Yet it doesn't justify their actions. In can explain why, but it still doesn't make it right. Your past doesn't justify your current actions because you always have a choice.

2) You feel miserable with how certain events turned out in life, so you vent in your fic. Every single "righteous" anger you have you funnel into the form of your characters. Judging by how your character treats Tsunade, your also how mother issues (or issues with some sort of leading woman in your life). Though in some regards, I can't blame you entirely. Women can be just as shitty, if not more shitty than men.

3) You are a hypocrite. Your character Naruto claims that he hates when people shackle him and others down, but yet he does the very same thing to other people. In your other fic, he hated how people tried to force people into relationships, yet he forced Jiraiya and Tsunade into one because he felt he "knew better than them". Isn't that what the Council, the Elders, Sandaime, and Danzo use as justification? That they felt they knew what was better for Naruto, Konoha, and the Elemental Nations? So basically, Naruto is using the very same tactics and justifications as the very people he vilifies and hates. So really, he is no different than the rest of the scum.

Reread the stories your wrote. Down to it's core, what really is different from Naruto and the other villains? Naruto often uses the same justifications and bullshit as the other evil characters. Even in this fic, he states that he hates people who lust for no reason, and forces their will on others. Yet, that is exactly what Naruto is doing. For fucks sake, he literally calls what he's doing "Konquest". It's fine if Naruto admits to and is another villain who conquers the others. But for you to state and claim throughout the story that he isn't, is both hypocritical and laughable.

Why does everyone make naruto look like his teachers when he trains with people in crossovers sometimes it makes sense but times like these it's just annoying