Wooo! I'm so excited! I'm glad you're still willing to write this wonderful story for us readers! I'll be watching!

'Hope you keep making progress. This story is a real gem. I haven't fished around for Kirby fics for years now. This one is definitely ripe and prime for chewing. It's a lot of text, so I'll take my time with it. Your portrayal of Meta Knight is incredibly convincing. As for the detail, how can I not respect that?

Keep up the excellent work!

-Sweey

Dear Author,
I great enjoyed your in-complete book and am amazed at how you write such lengths of writing. I envy you and your unlimited imagination but I was wandering wether you have considered Meta knight being changed my nightmare theory. I love your books and could go on for how much love this book but I need to get out is that :
thank you for my inspiration
Thank you for being my heroine
Thank you for your beautiful
Thank you for not throwing any of your stories in the bin
Thank you for your useful comments
Thank you for being courageous and true
Thank you trying your best and always being you
Thank you for this wonderful story
Thank you for being my hero
Thank you for everything
And for not adding Zero
Thank you is all I can say
I wish I could say more but
I've to write an essay for school to day.
What I'm trying to say is thank you Author.
We Meta knight fans love, you just know it. I'll tell my infamous fanfic friends about your work
Eg Metaknightforever
Lucky-9-Rose
And so on.
Thx
Metaknightlover
XXX

I only read the first chapter so far, but i can already say this is one of the better pieces out here. The part with the storyteller will be my favorite because i just love the way you put a future unknown to the character in there, while we can guess what is going to happen.

Aahhhhhhhhhhhhhhh whyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy... Er I mean I hope you update soon and don't rush you self... Fuck this please try hurry the fuck up a and don't rush tooo much

Whaaaaa finnaly reach the Knight part shocker but what about the wings

This is to good but please don't get affendid if I don't review I'm already having trouble remembering to review but this is an amazing story so I'll try to continue to review like a loyl fan

This is an amazing story I love how you made metastatic personality but I must wonder does he have wings at all I hope he does

I really can't get enough of this story its already an effort to just rip my mind off the next chapter long enough to review I hadn't read a story that captivates me as much as this one does in a long time you are a great wrighter

That was amazing this is an amazing story I can rip much eyes away from the story

Its good to see you're still around and that this story's still going on! Take your time if you need it; just knowing that its still being worked on is good enough for me. :)

will you be continuing this story? It's amazing and deserves to be continued I can understand if there are things going on in real life around you, but if you are ever able to, could you please continue this?

holy wow i've only read up to the 5th chapter and this is amazing :D

YES I FOUND AN AWESOME STORY :)
So much foreshadowing! Dun dun dun. Title drops are everywhere LOL. And the air on Ribbon star tastes like fruit? I wanna go there! XD

Let me guess, are the chapter titles going to spell "IN THE END"? *nods* Very nice.

For some reason, I keep on thinking that Nightmare's monster is going to be Galacta Knight (what is this nonsense i don't know), even though it makes more sense if it's Meta Knight. Kinda. Because you described the defective monster as a vibrant color, and he was in the stories. :/

This is one of the best stories in Kirby, hope you keep on updating because for some reason, a lot of good writers lose their steam before they finish. And their stories are left on a cliffy. D: Hope you get over this rut and update soon!

The plight of the unappreciated. If everyone invested as much effort as you, if everyone cared so much for their story and meticulously selected every word that makes it into the tale... This story would not be so special, neh? You shouldn't beg for reviews :C You are better than that.

There's a lot of thinking aloud in this review... but oh well XD Bear with me ;) Even if I don't comment on everything though, I am noting a lot of things.

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Chess matches between Nightmare and Meta have got to be the most intense ones I've ever read/watched. Left bishop... So that is Wolfwrath? Ah, or the other one you mention is him... as well as pawn on the board... hmmm

We haven't learned who the queen is yet, have we? For either side, that is. And I'm betting we won't for a while, if Nightmare intends to stick to his strategy, keeping the (technically) most powerful piece back for a while to prolong the game.

Oo, Nightmare's confident isn't he? X) And the rook is Masher... you may have mentioned that before... And I did notice that Meta feels as though he's been in the GSA for a much longer time than he has in reality.

"...since he'd come into the prescence of the Stars" I like that detail there... where you don't say Star Warriors, but rather simply Stars.

"He reached for his right knight and moved it out to B6, and Meta could not hide the shiver of fear that run through him." 'Run' should be changed to 'ran.'

Also... is this game taking place at a future time? I mean... it makes sense to be coinciding with the current events in the story, because he's just pulled out the bishop, which I'm assuming is still Wolfwrath to use... and also because the game is still in its earlier stages. But at the same time... Meta seems perfectly aware of this subconscious chess game during the times it's being depicted, but does not mention it anywhere else - which I attributed to him being sleeping and not having a conscious memory of it until he sleeps again. Hehee, don't tell me unless you really want to, because I like to puzzle it through. Unless I'm horribly off mark with that.

Aha, and I answer most of my questions by further reading. It has to coincide with current events in the story rather than later ones because you do confirm the bishop is Wolfwrath. Also, they're at the beginning of the chess match as they are the beginning of the war (for Meta, at least). Plus, all the pieces being played on the board mirror the events of the war. Which means... Meta did just place himself on the battlefield. Here's guessing that'll happen in the following chapter.

The fact Meta states he's been in the GSA a few weeks shows his conscious knowledge of time beyond this game. He's aware of both realities; the real war, and the metaphorical but sort of just as real chess match. At least, he becomes aware of them both during this scene, and only while playing the match.

Wow. Nightmare. Jeez. Huge evil dictator moment. And he then refers to Meta as Meta Knight. Hmmmmm

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"It wasn't that I couldn't fall asleep—no, I was far too tired to be at that point' ?

I feel like this is Meta's true welcome to the GSA. Well, technically it was last chapter, when he first fought Arthur. But these beginning paragraphs really demonstrate it. The changes that he's facing to his own self. I'm betting his first battles will only strengthen that.

Sir Arthur told him that forgetting the past is the only way to move forward? :o

AHA SO HE KNOWS! :) He knows about the chess game consciously as well. I mean... I know he mentioned it in a previous chapter, but it was a brief sentence that didn't elaborate on his feelings much. Now this... this is an interesting look on his take of the chess match. I feel like it's potentially dangerous for him to keep it to himself, y'know? Not just because of the nature of the match, but also because he's keeping a secret from all his fellow soldiers and Arthur himself, and it's a very perilous secret to be keeping.

"Merely a lie of omission..." But still a lie.

Love this part here; dunno what you would call it: characterization or otherwise, but Meta's thought about the match are very intriguing and kind of... well, sad. Because he is given the power to control and guide all the chess pieces on his side, which are all likenesses (or more) of the people his new life is built around... I also don't know how much effect the chess match has upon reality, but it does seem to be a considerable amount at the least. So essentially, their fate is in his hands. And the weight of what he feels in doing that... whether or not he believes it is a dream or reality...

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"And for one, I liked it." D'you mean for once?

"I was never one to be bored, but the sheer fact of having something to work towards to" Also there is no need for the 'to'

"the most any soldier could get was five minutes—and if you were lucky, three. " Technically, if you got three instead of five, wouldn't you be unlucky? I mean, I know what you mean, but... It just sounded a little weird.

Shall I point out each title drop? ;)

"It would be a long time until the morning meal—not until we'd stretched out every single muscle in our body " Bodies, for being plural?

I love this sentence, by the way: "If I didn't want people to think I was weak, then I might as well make it a fact and a truth." Through that it really seems that Meta isn't searching to make himself /look/ better than he is. I mean, yes, he doesn't want the other soldiers to see his humiliation and crumbling pride when he's with Arthur, but at the same time, he's not actively pretending to be better than he is. He's beginning to understand that if you want people to think you are strong... you must actually be strong. I say beginning, because I have a feeling he still has a long way to go with that.

"I looked up vunerably at the height of the bars" Did you mean vulnerably?

Oh my god! Nonsurat! I want to give him a huge high five. Is that strange? XD But the thing he made them do with the bars, where they had to count to ten and their success depends on each individual member working together... That was great. I mean... it might make them incredibly pissed at each other for a while, but eventually it'll definitely build their teamwork. Or so I would assume xD
And twice now Meta has made some comment related to enjoying heights. Just pointing out.
"Jecra shouted over the two others who were agressive enough to begin again." - aggressive
Wait, I was confused about this too: "... Without counting Jecra, I was the Squad's seventh soldier. But in technicality, if Jecra was counted...would I still be seven? Before I could think any further or break the chain, I called out seven and hoped that Vega, the only remaining soldier, would catch my mistake. He didn't, claiming eight instead..." Why would Jecra not count? Because he was originally the Squad Leader? And if so, why would it make a difference because the time they were initiated is no different? Either Vega was initiated before or after Meta, and that would be used to determine which number he is. Also, why would he wanted Vega to catch his mistake if catching it meant they would mess up? Ee, I'm confused. Aside from that confusion, though, I did love that routine... especially Meta's remark that they don't get along unless the situation requires it... which is unbelievably important

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And twice now Meta has also mentioned something about the air and stardust. :)

Oh I sort of get the numbering thing now.

And while useful... how does Arthur story directly correlate with Meta's question? I thought at first Meta meant why is there such dichotomy between some of the members, but Arthur then begins to talk about Nightmare.

Lawl. I like how you correlated Nightmare Enterprises with monsters, and Holy Nightmare Co. with demon beasts.

"But for you, my Meta...you will begin with the real thing." And thus the white knight gets his first move on the chessboard.
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Is it ironic that when you first described the ruined civilization, I thought for a brief moment that it was a nightmare created by Sir Arthur to imitate what Meta might eventually encounter? Heh, even though, of course, Arthur doesn't have those sort of powers.

The citizens of Ripple Star not having records of the place just added to that eerie feeling. Actually reminds me strongly of something in Lethe, but since it is an important something, as much as I want to tell you, I won't unless you really want to know xD

{Had to look up Kudzu vines. It looks like they devour everything o_0 Ah. "an invasive species it is considered a noxious weed that climbs over trees or shrubs and grows so rapidly that it kills them by heavy shading." Apparently also edible. Oh my god this plant is insane}

'Sir Arthur stepped through the threshold with me in tow, and I found that the inside of the place wasn't as vunerable-looking as the outside." Um. Again, I don't think vunerable is a word. It's vulnerable.

Whoa. Downloading demons for Meta to fight? I'm betting Nightmare, if he doesn't know already, will soon figure out what's going on and where exactly his demons are going.

"Alone, they are vunerable as soon as you strike through their weakness" *shit face*

That's not a horker, that's my wi- Oh sorry. FIGHT THE WALRUS. The Moon-class walrus.

""It is sensitive to noise," Arthur muttered quietly. "But its hearing is far stronger than its sight. See to it if you can exploit that!"" To be honest, I was kinda hoping you'd have Meta figure out its weakness himself. But... he didn't use it anyway so heh.

Y'know what I said earlier about Meta becoming more and more part of the army? Yeah this scene definitely adds to that.