O-O its such a weird feeling to read sth where Mello is mentally ill... And enjoy it. And feel bad for Mello. And feel sorry for him, even when he hurt Matt. Oh, im sure Matt will be mentally ill after that too :p. SO DARK! I liked it very much!

THAT MADE ME LAUGH SO HARD... POOR MAIL. hE SHOULD HAVE SAID HE LOVED MELLO LOL

W...what? End? No more? No Sequel? D:

I hadn't expected that. At all. I was gone for a couple of months from fanfiction, temporarily losing interest of DeathNote (I know, shame on me!) But when I checked my spam and saw you had updated, I realized how much I abandoned Mello and Matt. And this was one of the awesome stories I had my attention and patience focused on.

When I saw the “End” on the title chapters, I immediately thought, “What? The last chapter? How? What did I miss?” because I was expecting something cheesy and cuddly and sweet will happen at the end, even though you warned us at the beginning of the chapter that this had dark themes.

I was wrong. This wasn’t cheesy, cuddly OR sweet! T_T

All throughout the fic, I silently hoped Matt will give Mello a small chance. Or at least be his friend or something. But applying this in reality, I understand Matt's reaction to all of this. Having a creepy stalker and all…

...Hey. At least Matt's straight here.

But GOD. WHAT THE HELL, MELLO! You don't do that to Matt! That's just...just wrong! Seriously, I thought Mello will burn the place down when he opened the stove, and Matt died and Mello just earned his scar...

I loved how Carottal reviewed this story. The exact questions were floating in my mind. I actually wanted Mello to break down and beg in front of Matt to love him, and people will stare and feel sorry for him. I felt sad for Mello…so hopelessly in love. And as Carottal said, so innocent, too. He only wanted someone to take care of him, to love him…but his Matt wasn't a good choice. I was annoyed by Matt’s attitude, the way he denied Mello, pushed him away…and overall broke Mello’s fragile heart.

I loved how Mello immediately forgave Matt when he saw him with a girl. He didn’t even wait for an explanation. He was lost in his own world of fantasy that he disregarded reality.

Again, totally not expecting this!

THANK YOU FOR THE UPDATE. I loved the story as a whole, even though it was short and I would have gladly read thirty more chapters of this because a psychotic Mello always gets my attention.

Actually, I thought the crimes he committed was rape, or kidnapped Matt and locked him in his house or something…

And the doctor...she hadn't even crossed my mind! I loved her even more here. She wanted Mello to stop talking because she knows he'll say something that'll surely end him up in jail. And looking back at the previous chapters, she really cares for Mello.

The end was brilliant. This FIC is brilliant. Kudus to you :)

wow. that was just wow... i never expected any of that. it was amazing...

The. Fuck.

Ohh, that's the end? Such pity... I really liked reading it!

I actually thought a few chapters back that Mello had killed Matt. Guess not...

Amzing story! :D

Aha, just when I started following it, you complete it XD
Anyway, I liked it a lot!

So... it's finished? Damn... I want to see the trial now! I really want to! But it's your decision and your choice and I'm so glad you managed to finish it because at a moment I was afraid it would be dropped!
I just loved this story that is going straight to my favourites! It's original (unique), full of suspense, and so so interesting! You managed to make us feel bad for Mello!

This chapter was so full of tension. We knew it was the end, and we could feel something was going to happen soon. Matt has dressed up, his home is clean... we all know what it's for. All but Mello and the innocence he shows while entering Matt's flat is so tragic, when we know what is sure to happen. I just love how you managed to make Mello so lovable. Innocent, simple, in love. But possessive, with no notion of reality, in complete denial... selfish as hell, plainly crazy. And here, Matt comes back and we all dread what is going to happen.
I loved how you inserted those mine in the text to show how he was. It was like a voice in his head repeating mine over and over, wasn't it? That's how I took it.
I loved how it appeared Mello was reliving everything, to the point that when the doctor (by the way, did we know it was doctor Yagami? But I was shocked when reading that... was it because I had forgotten?) tells him it's over, he's too far gone to stop.

And that's one of the moment I appreciated the most in this fic. I loved how he just exploded. The tension was so high, we knew it was the last one, I was afraid you'd leave us there. And Mello was reaching the moment we've all been waiting for, it's the resolution, one of the hardest moment to write I believe. And you managed so well! And I wasn't expecting that at all! You kept surprising me from the beginning to the end. It was just awesome. I had imagined something more... that seemed more serious I'd say.

Even if Mello is found guilty, how long would he have to be in jail? I guess he'd be recognise as crazy but good behaviour exists in asylums as well... Will he be able to be free again? Will Matt truly act the way he expects him to? Will he go see him? You see, the problem with the way you created you Mello is that I care for him to much to just let him go to prison, I want to see more of him, I want to see how he'll live from now on. Will he stay in jail, waiting for his Matt in shining armour to save him? Will he avoid prison all together or be set free after sometimes and try to find Matt again? Will he kidnap Matt and not let him free until he loves him back? Will he understand?
I 've been wondering sometimes why he was so complying. Did he realise how he was digging his own grave or did he want to go to jail? Was he feeling more guilty than it seemed? Had he understood at last? Did he feel the need to go to prison... those kind of question. So when the shrimp asked, and he answered, it was the last surprise. No, he is still living his fantasy. And now, I want to see him understand reality. Maybe that's why I want to see the trial. I want to see if Matt will leave a testimony. I want to see how he'll react... Oh well, I feel i've been quite clear on this. I want to see that mind at work again, see this pure craziness.

But for now, I'm enjoying all this craziness you've given us in those 10 chapters and I thank you so much for it. If this fic didn't already exist, there should be someone to create it! But the honour is all yours and well, just thank you!

Oh my gosh Mello!
That was really crazy. . . I liked it :D
Since Mello already tried popping the question, I wonder what other extreme is left. . .

Wow, I love this story! It's not the normal 'bunnies and flowers' kind of story and that's why I like it. I'm happy that you updated I can't wait to read next chapter! Awesome. I like the trama, the Mello's Pov, good grammar and your style to write. So keep on with the good job!

Matta ne!

I hope Mello didn't hurt Matt or something... That would be so sad. But this story is awesome! I hope to see an update soon (: I don't really have much to say, though. It's written fine. Maybe you could put a line between Mello's memories of Matt, to his meetings with the Doctor. Because it seems jumpy this way. But other than that, I really have nothing else to point out.

I like Mello's POV. You describe his obssesive personality well. For example, the way he said that Matt's eyes widened because he was happy to see him. You managed to capture a mind of a person like Mello good, and you play with it. I think you did a good job.

Thanks for sharing!

I'm so happy you're not dropping this story!

I can't wait to discover what he did, the suspense is getting heavier (is it the good expression?) with every passing chapter and to know it shouldn't be long now makes it even harder to wait!
murder (matt or a girlfriend)? kidnapping? robbing? harrassing? rape? violence? I wonder what it was, what crime could he feel needed? for now, I'd say kidnapping, rape or harrassing. I don't want Mello to be a murderer! (I know, in the manga he kind of is but still! not a Mattmuderer!)

Mello's delusions are very interesting: when he imagines them first, he seems to know they're not real. he even thinks it would never happen but nevertheless, he then acts as if he was entitled to live them for real. It's interesting though I'm not sure what to think of it: a great way to show how his madness works or simple incoherence? I tend to think it's the former!

Matt's reaction is a tiny bit strange: why doesn't he call the security? hasn't he understood it won't help him to be nice to Mello? or maybe he understands too well and knows there's nothing he could do. I don't know!

Anyway, I look forward to the next chapter, as usual and thank you for this one!

Can he get some lovin?

The more it goes on, the more Mello is obsessed. It's great. Though is it me or he's no longer persuaded that Matt loves him back and is just playing hard to get? I just wonder because it seems he's pretty desperate.

And here, it seems Mello is a cleptomaniac (not sure if that's what it's called) too. What a case he is!

Thanks for this chapter and I'm glad you've decided what his crime was.

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