this is actually pretty cool

So... is L a shinigami or... that one "delete"dude or like everyone else?

L, oh, L, you CRAZY MOTHERF*&# ER, you are hallucinating! (i seriously almost choked and died laughing at this.)

Thanks, Emely, for being honest! I'll read over it and take the criticism into consideration in future chapters.

I think this chapter was good but...hmmm how to put this...It feels kinda rushed and you forgot to put a "e" in "he" when Kai was talking and twice "he" was cap locked. this chapter was really not needed or...let's say you could of added more...pretty much this chapter was about light eating apples and messing with L. like I like it and all...it's not bad I thought it was kinda funny accually...but... you could of at least put that Kai was thinking of a new plan...tell the viewers and end it there so we can finish in suspense. again not a bad chapter

Good job hun.

Ah! That was by far the most entertaining chapter yet! :D I like the humor that was tossed in, but also the fact that it wasn't just a filler chapter that didn't have any plot in it. Keep up the good work! :)

Nice job :)

nice :) please continue writing

This is really cool! I loved the characters, well, of course I did! How can someone not love themselves?...Don't answer that. Also, good luck with NaNoWriMo! I did it in November and it was tons of fun! Stressful at times, but it's worth it!

Hmm...I didn't really catch any spelling or grammar errors. So I can't really make suggestions like that...

Keep up the good work!

awesome plan right there!

Bring L back to life!

i think if you really need to make OCs for light plan, then they'll be killed any way right? or if you need more shinigami, as long as they aren't unlike shinigami, i think shinigami OCs would be fine.

:3 moooooooooooore? i like the idea and am curious what light is thinking!

I really like this idea. I can't wait to find out what he's planning. I'm not so keen on the "bringing people back to life part" since they're God's of Death, but ok.