Not usually into Hardison/Parker but this one's good. Wish there was more.

Please finish this.

I loved the story ene tough I'm feeling a little bad for Parker but I guess she'll turn out fine.

I also like the way you portrayed Nana.

Can't wait to see the way it comes out...

Good second chapter. I like the characterisation of Nana. :)

-Iamala

These two mini chapters are great, so don't sell yourself short D

Oh, Parker! I feel bad for her because she doesn't understand. Nice cliffhanger though - not too over the top. Just enough to leave us wondering D

Just get it up when you can, honey. :)

I liked this chapter! Nana seemed real nice. Until Parker said "real", anyway. But, I can understand how that could be hurtful.

Again, nothing to complain about. :) The chapter's flow was perfect, as was everything else.

Well done, can't wait for the last part!

-Orwell

Aha! Finally found you! (Love the new Pen Name, by the way. :))

This is a really good start! The grammar is fine and the story flow is perfect! You really have nothing to worry about. I don't really watch Leverage, but I had a vivid picture in my head while reading this. :)

Hardison seems like a sweetie. :)

On to the next chapter. Don't worry about a thing.

-Orwell

Poor Parker, she always has trouble saying the right thing. I assume Parker is calling Sophie? Please don't abandon this story, I really love it. I love your other one too, and I want you to finish both of them.

Great intro, you really have a talent for writing the characters. I think this would be something cute to see on the show, Parker meeting Nana. You did a great job of showing Parker's insecurities. I also love your disclaimer.

Oh, I like it so far. As I was getting to the end of the second chapter, I thought,"This doesn't seem like the story is about to end." And I was right. Funny how it works out, especially when we only plan a specific number of chapters from the beginning. The idea usually grows. :)

Liked this.

Its a great story keep going :)

I thought it was very good and in character. I LOVE the Parker Hardison relationship and I think you portrayed it well. :) [Iamala]

This is brilliant Looking forward to chapter 2

Love,Peace,Parker oxo

I like. Don't give up! You write Parker really well. BTdubs, loved your disclaimer.