Cool story.

Note: THAT PROFILE PICTURE... IF THAT'S FROM THE SHOW I THINK IT'S FROM... That horrific show... Happy Tree Friends... DON'T WATCH IT I'M WARNING YOU!

O_O dragons eat gem stones? -_- i need to catch up with fantasy creatures

man pinkie pie is so confusing all the time, i like your story
maybe that stone had another spell on it that spike only will
have and infutation with twilight and no one else thats my conclusion
why he doesnt fall for rarity whe nhe had eaten the stone, your story
is really good and very interesting cant wait to read more as soon as possible please write further on it. *gives you cookies for inspiration*

lol pinkie pie is funny i like it so far update soon plz nya?

Have to admit, I really like this story. I'm a big fan of Twi/Spike romance and am glad to have read such an awesome story. I'm honestly hloping to see more. Though I wish they would fall for one another more naturally. Great job, if you even need any help, ideas or advice, I got your back, peace.

This is interesting. I am enjoying this. Do update soon.

I'm really enjoying this story so far. There are grammatical errors in the first few chapters, but they seem to have cleared up in chapter 4. The only other criticism I have is that the end of this chapter seems to just stop all of a sudden like it was in the middle of a paragraph. Might wanna work on how to appropriately close a chapter. Other than that, it looks pretty good. Your prose is a little clunky here and there, but it's otherwise fine, everyone's in-character, and the comedy and tension are making this a lot of fun to read. I hope you follow this story through to its finish.

Tell me it's the same stuff that happened to Big Mac and Cheerilee.

This story is still very interesting, I will be awaiting the next chapter.

I really enjoy this. Keep up the good work.

Holy crap, you can just feel the awkwardness dripping off of the page. Yet you can also feel the confusion of Twilight. This is pretty well written. I am so curious as to who sent the gem. Do update soon. :)

let see where this goes

want to see where this goes

This is interesting. I do so enjoy it. I never thought of this pairing before. But hopefully you can pull it off as you have been so far in just two chapters. keep it up and update soon

Hey, I know you. You used to write for the Penguins of Madagascar and you were my favorite author! Didn't you have another account, TriPenguinMan? Anyways, it's awesome that I'm stumbling upon you in the Brony community.

Great chapter, and I just have a couple of little comments. First of all is your dialogue.

["I understand." Twilight said. "I'll talk to him."]

With dialogue, you need a comma instead of a period when you have a speech tag at the end. Common speech tags are: said, replied, shouted, whispered, etc. Any verb that indicates speech.

Therefore, it should be:

"I understand," Twilight said. "I'll talk to him."

Of course, if you don't have a speech tag, then you use a period. An example would be...

"I understand." Twilight laughed. "I'll talk to him."

Another thing, it's spelled Fluttershy. Not really a big issue here. :P

Twilight/Spike is one of my favorite shippings, so I'll definitely keep reading this story.