The ending was not satisfying. I. Liked your story well enough to read through to the end.

Babe, you did really well. I enjoyed the story and the progression and all the turns it took. Don't let one person get you down. You may be an amateur as you call yourself but being a fanfiction connoisseur myself, I can safely say that your writing is good. You used proper grammar (I appreciate that) and I can't say the same for many authors, and I thought you handled the story line very well. You started out light and fluffy slowly moving into a deeper topic and it was executed brilliantly. Sure you had a few errors here and there but did it take away from the story? No. After all, we are all human and I know I let spelling errors get the best of me at times (where would I be without spell check) so expecting 100% perfection is just a tad bit unrealistic now. :) Keep doing you.

XO

It's your story so tell it like you want too. If someone can not adapt to a minor word change, well it's there lose. The story is very good! Keep it up. Can't wait for more.

Sex with somebody's wife so he could join a sleeper cell? The author of this is crazier than the nutcase character.

jp

"They got in the loft and headed up to the loft."

I'll never understand why amateur writers refuse to proof read their stories.

jp

This was a great story. Thanks for writing it.

Sad to see this story end but glad that things were resolved.

This was a totally awesome story!

Thank you for taking the time to write it

Great story..Good writing..

What a great chapter and a great story sad to see it end

This was so good that I hate to see it end. Thank you for writing it.

So far great keep up the writing can't wait for more updates thanks again

I loved how Rick told Kate what happened in Gates' office. I loved how Rick gave Martha the letter Hunt had penned. Please continue.

Great chapter!

Great chapter. Hate to see this one go, but I understand about the reasons.