lol videl hissing saying to sayianman good i am glad that you came to your senses that you stop flying and running away from me that you stop hiding your life from me i am happy that you let me love you i really do love you son gohan with all my heart

Videl to gohan why didn t you just be honest with me from the start lying to your soon to be gf is not the way to start a relationship

cute

I really liked this story, it was great for a first fic. You kept everything quite organized, and the story idea was a great one. Overall, this was good, keep writing, you've got potential. Good luck! :)

Not bad for a first fanfic. When writing a one shot, you really should focus on one event rather than spreading the event over a huge swath of dbz history. Grammer is pretty good, sentence structure is good. Anyways, nice first fic, good luck in your fanfiction career :)

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