Omg that is the shortest lemon I've ever read!

Very good but short I wish I could have read what was going to happen in the bed room seemed like it would be good

its uncommon to find a fanfic that is 90% yaoi :D thanks for the entertainment!

Hehe! Ichi and grimmy are so hot together!XD

i dont really like giving bad reviews, but i think you should have added some more description in your story, or maybe had someone to beta it, it would've turned out a lot better...best of luck to you in the future though, just remember to descripe things more! :)

im very sorry to this,i mean ive never left a bad review,but i think your story is poorly not very descriptive,and short and ibjust dont like your writing style right sure if ud write more and imprived ud be writing wonderful stories,but right now i really just dont like ,but i hope this helps you and gets you a step closer to what you an artist myself,just from a diffrent kind,and its not just good comments that help us to get a good day (: