Ohh, that was really touching. I love it :)

That was really good! Your commas are a bit erratic sometimes, but the story is great regardless. You know what this really reminds me of? That scene in Deathly Hallows when Ron comes back and Hermione starts punching him and yelling at him. It follows nearly exactly like that. Hehehehehe.

Well done...really..I have read quite a few of these and this is really good...