AWESOME! You used Glitch's ending phrase thing! :D

Is that... Is that a 'Completed' sign I see there? NO. No this - this cant, this WONT do. Youjusscantleabitthereee! Unf, I've been trying to re-read yer story for DAYS & liek... It keeps saying that it's unavailable or some shit which got me all pissed. I thought the web server was juss screwing with me but it wasn't. Sooo liek, when it FINALLY decides to work, I actually read it again and see that you've changed a couple words here and then? That's greeeat. Much more better. More intriguing. Goshies, took me ages to spell 'intriguing'. Arghhh.

Not that this might matter to you, but I generally don't read fan fiction where the characters are weeeell... not screwing each other (kinda contradicting seeing as how I've written platonic stories) and I definitely wouldn't have read it twice. Logging out to write a another review just goes to show that I worshippppp your writing. I've said it before, and I'll say it again. It's fantastic.

But you broke my heart. No update? Utter sadness.

The word "hate" was kinda thrown out there in the first couple of senetences. I think its only me, but I find it a bit annoying when words are repeated more than 3 times in a certain amount of sentences. I get that it might be hard to find other words to depict what you're tryna say... believe me, I've been down that road, but try changing it up a bit, ey?

On another, more positive note... The words you just use further down are fantastic. The detail is there and all that shizz but I did find it a bit hard to understand. Although I have to admit that the originality of the origins of Glitch's name was just soo righteous gold. I love how Glitch shuts Mo down with such a ... conceited? attidude. Utter smex. Jizztastic.

The way you portrayed the characters were rather intruiging; Mo's persuasive skills - the way you wrote it was just plain clever. Never wouldda though ov that.

& WTFLOLMANG? Blu-Ray? How Asian could you get? What would posses a person... Naw, I kid. That Hi Def thing... Now THAT'S original. Lurved it. Also loved that little DC2 quote. Heard that several times & got me thinkin YTF Steve?

"It's a name my brother came up with. He

tells me I'm the 'glitch' in the family even

though he's the one constantly screwing

up," Now that just wowed my pants off. Bravo.

You need to put some looooove in there. I bet you'll be flawless in writing it.

It's so cool! You did make it original! That's awesome, cuz most of the people on here got the same ideas. Grenade made a anew hi-def story and it's coming out good. I REALLY enjoyed reading this and I love how everything flows smoothly and naturally! Like on some stories the characters just don't act right. Like "Hey, wanna join my crew?" and then the character would be like "of course! Let's drive to the new apartment of our crew!" and I'm like 'what? They didn't pack or anything and why would u say yes so easily?' but yours is in very vivid detail! I can't wait to read more