The sentence refuting your grammatical errors is full of grammatical errors.

With that said, the chapter itself was very entertaining and interesting. I liked it!

Uhh First person? Is that going to continue?

This dude needs to learn to be a teenager. Having sex is part of that, lmao. Why is he putting off something they both want for literally no reason at all? As he said, the bond just speeds up the process, it doesn't make you do something you don't already want to do. xD

A fun story that hasn't been updated in ages... such a shame.

NOOOO! it can not end here!..please update

Well this fic was amazing until Kieron was introduced. He is forced into this story like a pregnant women into skinny jeans. Why did Harry trust him so fast? He trusted him more than people like Neville, which he knew for 5 years

I was enjoying this until you put in your OC. The story as a whole is OOC and has no depth, no dynamics. Everything is just Hunky Dorey in the world of Harry Potter. Everything is starting to go his way. where is the struggle? where is the conflict? I was able to tolerate and even actually enjoy the shallowness of this story until this chapter and your horrible OC.

If you pair Ron with Daphne, I will smash my computer and forget I ever read it

Please keep this going

Such a delightful start of a story. The character interactions are well thought out, and it's like looking in on an alternate Harry Potter story. Please, continue.

I think this chapter ruined this story. Your OC is pretty bad, but the way he said he had nothing to live for, but has all these friends popping up rings completely false.

Just as a French FYI Harry wouldn't say "mon amour" he would say "M'amour" which is the abbreviated form of ma amour. In French you can't have two A's like that so it becomes M'amour. Ma is feminine while mon is masculine and since if he was saying it would apply to Fleur.

Good story. I look forward to more. Just a word of warning, Kieron seems to be overshadowing everyone. He's too perfect. It's not bad or anything. Just thought I would give you my opinion

While I do love this story, I think you love your OC way too much. Other than his anger, Keiron just seems too OP. He kind to everyone but dark wizards and is a fabled elemental.

Well this is a brilliant fic and I am definately going to be following and favoring it. Your characters are very well written and though some are a little OOC, Hermione with how she talks and somewhat acts. The rest is very canonish. I love the fact you have Fleur and Harry in a committed relationship and married already. Didn't seem rushed or sudden to me. Fleur seems like the kind of character that when she sees something she wants and knows that's what she wants she goes for it 100%. The fact you are giving them some alternate powers to their magic is fun to read and having them work to perfect and use them is great. The Kieron character you created seems like a very Harry-like character which is great to go with Hermione. I would rather see her with an OC than Ron any day, though your Ron even being OOC is a fun character to read. On to the ginger putting him with Susan then making the Slytherin girls lesbians is a bit of a clever writing. It gives Ron a love interest and keeps Daph and Tracey in the story and not being chased by some dumbarse guy that Harry adn Kieron may have to kill later on. Speaking of Dead men when will Krum get his arse handed to him and please let it be a dual mauling by Harry and Kieron or a trifecta by adding Ron. What that Bulgarian prat did deserves his bullocks hanging from his nostrils. Okay I may be from the US but it is more fun to rant using Brit words and sounds better. Anyway Great story and please keep it going and going soon.