I gotta say, I am extremely impressed with this story. You should be proud of what you have written here, miss. You haven't skimped on details, you weren't afraid to delve into some of the more darker aspects of life and you chose something I don't see very often to portray in Alistar, to show her struggle. Even the obvious struggle that Rain has with her sexuality was an amazing refresher to see.

This story, and I'm willing to bet subsequent stories, has me enthralled from chapter 1 and had me constantly coming back for more. And you know you have done a really good job when I'm constantly wanting to continue reading even while I am at work. Very well done indeed!

The only thing I have to offer is that throughout the story, and the second one as I am already reading it as of writing this review, are small sentence structure and grammatical errors. Nothing huge that it detracts from the story as you're intent is still clear. It's only a small thing that is overshadowed by the story as a whole. Still, if I may offer a friendly suggestion, read over your chapters a couple of times to pick up on these small mistakes. When you are confident there are none, I, personally, would get a second pair of eyes to give a quick read over. I know from experience how easy it is to miss things but are picked up by others.

Regardless, I am very impressed. I am very much looking forward to reading the following two stories for this series. To give you an indication of just how much I really am enjoying, I started the second story only today and I'm almost halfway through it already. I just can't stop reading it.

Well done once again and keep it going!

This is beautiful favorite MH story of all and really well done there are a few spots that was confusing to read due to the words used seemed like spellcheck mishaps but those were few and far between although now I just can’t hunt Raths anymore but I thank you for this amazing contribution to the fanfiction world end super long comment

you my friend wrote an amazing story¡!

Always wanted a Momma fic like this. Hope some guy with a Deviljho shows up and starts a rescue arc.

An monster is no longer an monster when it gains sentience

This story is already good! I'll continue reading this for sure.

I officially feel like an asshole for every monster I've captured

I'm so jealous I want one... Then again I want one of everything on monster hunter... Except that farting monkey monster they can go extinct for all I care... Do you plan to get monster hunter stories?

Wow chapter two and already someone in your story I'm coming up with creative ways to kill had I been her though I'd have probably thrown him overboard and acted like I was trying to catch him after "oops the asshole I mean your crewmate fell"

Rare as it is for me to say I only have a few issues on details or rather the lack thereof... What do these people look like and what switchaxe and armor does Alistair have? I do have a short term memory problem so if it was only stated once I may have just forgotten but I don't remember

Wow that really

so good ! just so good !

ok... this is awsome ! really ! thank you so much for this amazing story. gonna have fun reading the rest of it !

Amazing work on the story, through and through! The Drama and emotion put into the story is amazing. I'm anxious to dive into the second!

Loved the story, great work.