is it not canon? why rewrite canon?

Pity there has been no updates. This is far more innovative that most ME stories on

On the off chance you continue this, what's the chance the alliance is going to have a bunch of ground based and orbital platform based heavy weapons? We've had high energy high frequency emitters for a long ass time (since Nicola Tesla) and just recently got rail guns so it's not unreasonable that with your canon bucking AU microwave ovens and radar could have become weaponized. Hell, your vasmir engines are ion canons used as thrust devices.

Are you ever going to update this?
I really like the story and would love to see it continue.

...and we all know how that ended.
Been looking for this story for days, very nice turn around and well written.

Disgusting Batarians should have every single one of their worlds bombed with nuclear war heads and the entire species wiped out.

Sorry about that, where was I?

Also, please update this story first. It is far more overdue for some attention than your other stories and despite its' length it's my favourite.

The Alliance defense fleet in orbit will, in my opinion, not want a decisive engagement with the pirates. Facing superior numbers on such a scale they will want to deny the pirates system supremacy by harassing them with hit and run attacks. This will prevent the pirates from doing as they like as they will always have to keep their guard up, slowing down any planetary assault they have planned and giving the defense forces of the ground and in the air a fighting chance.

Please don't let it be some curb stomp battle like in other stories. Naval battles are often indecisive with the inferior force breaking contact to retreat.

Also, please update this story firs

This story feels like it's a continuation of "Predestined", even though it's older. Too bad it has not been updated in so long, I quite enjoyed the storytelling and the new way, at least for me, it is looking at the ME universe.

Hi, wanted to point out that your story summary has "Caesar" spelled incorrectly as "Ceasar".

This is all very good writing and quite believable. Great job, sad that you stopped updating.

Pity you haven't updated in a while, the story was getting good. Not to mention that the setup in the verge had the possiblity of making a very different Alliance.

So just incase you pick this up again I'll have an alert

In this story, you wrote that it took other races thousands of years to achieve interstellar flight after inventing radio. That's not realistic, if that were the case, the races would have exhausted all their resources long before interstellar travel. Then they wouldn't be able to achieve interstellar flight. It would be more realistic to say that it took the other races a few hundred years to achieve interstellar flight after inventing radio.

After they attack Elysium, Tevos will probably feel extreme remorse for letting the humans colonize in the verge. Especially since she was the victim of a Batarian attack. (Your other story 'Predestined')

Could you make it so they just have an embassy and don't abide by citadel regulations and treaties?