:D

it good

Ah, that was a lovely present. But what exactly is Blue thanking Red for?

I liked how you pointed that Blue wouldn't like Green based on how he treats her. As well as pointing out that Blue likes Red based on how much she loves to flirt and tease him.

A shame you couldn't go into details about the love making. XD But hey, what ha gonna do!

That was funny

this should be M, right?

Beyond awesome.

Awes-mazing

Very nice story! Although I think you should change this to rated M for...yeah you know...

[1 month ]

Write out numbers with letters.

[if it rains." thought Red. ]

Dialogue is written as "Hello," he said or "Hello!" he said, never "Hello." He said or "Hello." he said or "Hello," He said or "Hello" he said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, in which case it's written as "Hello." He grinned, never "Hello," he grinned or "Hello," He grinned or "Hello." he grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's "Hi," he said. "This is it." not "Hi," he said, "this is it." or "Hi," he said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's "Hi. This," he said, "is it." If there's no speech verb in the break, you use a dash, like "Hi. This - " He looked around. "- is it." And the same punctuation and capitalization applies to thoughts.

And don't use quotation marks for thoughts, it makes it look like it's being spoken.

Yes! Luckyshipping! Awesome job, but I don't like how you made Pika say something negative about Yellow. She's nice, but I prefer her with Silver rather than Red.

hey, another great story.

as usual, Blue's pretty bold. no, really bold. and this is the first story i read that Blue done almost all the work. wow,

say, will you make more? pretty please?