Here I am, BEGGING you to update!
I really love your OC - she's so far from being a Mary sue but still so interesting that it's amazing. It's wonderful seeing an Alternate who isn't the shy husk people make him out to be in most fiction, and I think you've portrayed BB in a unique way too. I also love Watari and Rodger's conflicting characters as well as how well you've put L across. Your writing is impeccable and I urge you to keep going - no, I PLEAD you! And on such a cliffhanger, too!
I really hope to hear more from you soon. :) 3

This is interesting, I like it. You should add more parts with her in the present, though. I wanna know what happens and its making me anxious! So the boy dies? Update soon please!

Hi! I loved this stoy , this is truly what i was looking for from the first time , i'm really looking forward to the next chapter and i think your writing is amazing , C's character is unique and i like that you also have A, B, M, and L in the same story also that your chapers are soo long , thats why i like your story and also the plot is great , please post a new chapter soon because this is really great i just really hope A doesn't have the same fate as he had in the books and the same for L as well because i really don't want any of them to die!

WOW! What the hell Roger and Watari! That was so mean!

This definitely has a lot of potential, and as far as Wammy stories go, I like that you're staying away from most of the stereotypes. However, as a Grammar-Nazi, I would suggest that you get a beta reader to catch those comma-mistakes. Your flow is interrupted and broken by those errors; it takes away from the plot. But I think you have really good ideas and I encourage you to keep going with this fic.

Can't wait to see more,

~Autarkic

Please update soon, I WANNA KNO WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!

YAY Beyond Birthday! I am super curious to why he can't see C's life span though, however for a second there i thought he was falling in love with her, possible pairing?

Better, I think, and easier to read. It's much nicer to have the characters coming together, and to see the relationship between A and C.

Keep up the good work.

C.

Not bad, I am intersted to see where this might go. Keep up the good work! Update soon!

Okay, here we go - not bad for a first fic, to be honest. Characters not bad, storyline good (dark themes of Wammy's a nice touch, keep that up), but you may want this story beta'd to help space out those meaty paragraphs to make it easier for readers and sort out the grammar a bit. When using punctuation for the end of someone talking, finish with a comma and speech marks, or full stop and speech marks, otherwise it looks like it's just a quotation.

That is all. I shall read the next chapter and let you know. Good luck!

C.