Hi! Fandom-blind, so please excuse me if I get canon things wrong here.

I find myself really engrossed in the talk about telepath and empathy. What makes it especially a fun read is that you've managed to avoid info-dump. While the paragraph is fairly long, it's not overly long to the point it becomes a wall of text. It's interesting to know that emotions have something to do with it, which makes Nathan's feelings for Wendy pretty touching. It's especially moving when Nathan starts to doubt that he does love Wendy or not.

The last part, which is more about the relationship between Nathan and Kristin, is moving as well. This time Nathan truly loves Kristin. Without a doubt. Unlike the way he loves Wendy. This part [Wendy's death did not break him, not the way Carol's had. Not the way Kristin's would, he thought.] shows it effectively. But when Nathan whispers a goodbye at the end, there's still a hint that he also cares for Wendy. But of course, his love for Wendy is not as great as his love for Kristin. That's incredibly sweet and touching!

Quick pointers:
- At first, I mistake this ["Do you mind if I sit down?" Nathan looked up to see one of the older telepaths standing beside him.] as Nathan speaking, which doesn't ring true with the next paragraph. I'd recommend splitting it into two paragraphs, with the second paragraph combined with the next one. That'll clear up the confusion and make the read flow better.
- There are a few typos here and there, such as missing commas, but a reread can easily solve them.

Great work! :)

I'm a bit familiar with SeaQuest and its characters, but not much.

I like the conflict involving Nathan and his feelings for Kristin, all while he sorts through the serious issues around Wendy. Wendy herself sounds like an interesting character - how she proved to Nathan than "not all telepaths are psychotic" in spite of his previous encounter with Clay. Savannh seemed to be pretty impressed by that. While Nathan ultimately doesn't love her the way he loves Kristin, I like how you acknowledge that they were still good friends and he is upset by her death, even though the possibility is brought up that his feelings may be a postmortem illusion brought about by Wendy's empathic abilities.

The older telepath is an interesting character, especially how she enters Nathan's mind to guide him through his complicated feelings surrounding Kristin and Wendy, as well as how he realizes that the telepaths' empathic abilities are influencing his own emotions. I like that it isn't Wendy's fault, and she may not have been aware of this particular side effect to her own powers. His love for Kristin is not influenced by telepathy - "Did I really love you Wendy" - but is one-hundred-percent shared feelings between Nathan and Kristin, which makes it more special to him.

At the end, I'm glad that Nathan was able to find closure on Wendy's death and decided to keep going, having a happy marriage with Kristin. Kristin seemed understanding that Nathan had to let go of "the second love of his life" before he could be truly happy again, and I'm glad that all signs at the end of the story point to a happy future between the two of them.

Great job - I really liked the emotional relationships explored between the characters and Nathan's exploration of his feelings.

Hello! I'm canon myopic, I'm afraid, but still ready to enjoy!

My first impression s that you do very well with communicating how important Kristin is to Nathan. The "four faces" bit sorts out his priorities, and saying that he thought about Kristin's face more than the other three combined is great characterization.

Calling Lansdowne "Downy" also helps to show how Nathan, despite his envy and/or jealousy, maintains a fairly good relationship with the man he thinks has taken Kristin's heart. That makes the fact that Kristin and Lansdowne are not together a much better reveal.

Interesting that Nathan is telepathic, and the reveal that telepaths can unintentionally project emotions is timed and set up very well. I also like how you intersperse Nathan's thoughts (as picked up by the telepath) with normal dialogue. It really cements the fact that he is, in fact, talking to someone who can pick up his thoughts - if that statement makes any sense.

You know, I really wondered why Nathan suddenly had...feelings towards Savannah - especially since I'm canon-blind. However, once again, you time the reveal of Savannah's projecting very well, and the mystery clicked into place. Poor girl; I'm glad she was let down easy.

Nathan and Kristin's moment together is, through the description of Nathan's physical senses, very romantic. Consequently, the love he has for her touches and resounds in my heart; that gives more "oomph" to the bit where Nathan talks about how Kristin's death would affect him.

The ending is very touching with that sole "goodbye". I'm glad that Nathan has sorted out his feelings for Wendy and isn't allowing himself to be completely hung up over her death. Moving on like that is so hard, but it must be done if we are to move forward. Nathan becomes much more admirable for realizing and acting on this point.

Nitpicks (SPaG):

- "...son Lucas but...": Not separating "Lucas" and "but" with a comma makes this sentence flow like a run-on. It got jumbled and left me a bit behind. This nitpick happens occasionally throughout the rest of the story.

- "eye balling": YMMV here, but shouldn't this be "eye-balling"?

- "You are aware captain of...": The "captain" should be separated from "aware" and "of" with commas. That word, in this context, is a mild interjection and needs the separation in order to take full meaning. Watch out for that; I picked up several instances of this while I was reading.

- "Yes well as I was...": Same issue.

- When we get to the conversation between Nathan and the telepath, it's confusing as to who's saying what during and slightly after the mention of Clay. The gender pronouns and the way the lines of dialogue are separated make it all sound jumbled to me.

- "being-like": I know you meant a dash here, but this looks like just a hyphen.

A very touching one-shot. Good job!

This was an interesting piece. Now, I am a bit fandom blind, but I read a few sQ authors so I am not completely blind to some of the characters and story arcs. I love how you twist things into an even more unusual way (because isn't sQ already unusual in some of its storylines and characterizations?) by involving something so simple as this idea of telepathy and empathy playing a key role in influencing emotions. It reminds me of the Xenogenesis series by Octavia Butler, in that the Ooloi and Oankali race can influence certain thoughts, feelings and behaviors in their human counterparts.

I really love how you showcase what Nathan feels here with this line: ((Nathan had tore out of there and up to Kristin's room in what seemed like seconds.)). That he rushes to Kristin just as soon as he learns how she is still single really shows how his feelings are still strong and that he's not happy without her. Love how you have them finally confront each other and their feelings and choose to be together.

Here is where you introduce Sci-Fi type things: (("Telepaths can project their minds sometimes, but what they don't always know is that they can project emotions.")). This feels very SW or Trekkie to me in how it takes the notion of the novum and twists it. There's a cognitive logic at play here which involves the empathy and telepathy potentially influencing Nathan's feelings for Wendy. Again, feels very Butler for me (and I like it!)

I like how you choose to have Nathan look up at the heavens here: ((It was not the ocean that had his attention, as was usually the case, but the stars.)). It shows his belief in that Wendy (and Carol) has moved on to the next plane, that she's smiling down at him, that she's smiling.

The finality of this simple line: (("Goodbye.")) says it all. He's moving on, he's done, he's going to live his life from every day forward from now on. Perfect ending.

This was a nice piece, full of lots of good things. Great job!

I lol'd at the first line. Sometimes it's the only explanation as to why canon goes awry: someone has inexplicably gone insane somewhere. (And heck, that or "it was a dream" have actually been used on real shows :p

As a show that did deal with telepathy, it seems clever and apt that you use it to explain wtf was going on with Nathan. It seems reasonable too (in a world where telepathy is reasonable :p) but also, gotta say, a bit creepy... uh, yep. It's pretty much mental Stockholm syndrome ;)

And you fixed it, yay! Really liked the ending, which even though I barely remember this show gave me lots of warm fuzzies.

A couple of SPaG issues. If Nathan's being directly address it should be, "Yes, Captain" etc (capitalised, comma.) A few other missing commas here and there. "Eye balling" should be "eyeballing" (loved the expression, btw!)

Thank you for writing xx

I’m a sucker for anything Nathan and Kristin. I love them. I really liked the way you broke down the different stages. You went from talking about his almost death and who he saw in what could have been his final moments, to getting Kristin, to a whole other realm of thinking. I loved the flow and progression. Of course, I was thrilled when he finally got Kristin back. I like the melancholy feeling that came across when he figured she was with someone else. I also loved that he went after her as soon as he found out she was hung up on him. That was really cute. The part with Savannah was funny in a way. The way he mentally chastised himself for looking at her when he was with Kristin was adorable but not at the same time. I love the woman’s comments. She sounds so friendly and charming. I do wish she had a name. (Perhaps I missed it?) I like the way she explains the telepathic thing and also gives the hint that possibly Wendy did that to Nathan. I do love his thoughts on the island at the end. He admits he felt something, but at the end of the day it’s Kristin who’s won him over. I was a bit surprised to read they were getting married. I know it said earlier that he wanted to wait until he found Robert. Does that mean he changed his mind? I really liked this. It was cute!

LOL, I absolutely loved your opening line. Works great as a lead in, and it's an amusing mental image as well.

This theory about the whole Wendy/Nathan relationship is quite interesting, and I actually really like what you did here. It makes a lot of sense, actually. And I actually really like the fact that he's only figuring this out after everything that happened on Hyperion, because now he can't go and talk to Wendy and try to find out what was actually happened between them... it's a very said way to end their story, but it also seems very right in many ways. He's very lucky that he still has Kristin.

I really loved how you ended this piece on the note of their wedding. I have a feeling that Wendy would be smiling at them both if she knew what was happening. Because Kristin and Nathan really are meant to be.

I think I'm adding this explanation to my personal head canon, because it made me annoyed when Nathan was all over her in that season. Very nice way of clearing up that part of the mystery!

A lovely little piece! I really enjoyed it.

Cheers, dearie!

I just loved this story! Thank you so much! I hope you think of more stories soon. :)

I think the 'empaths projecting accidentally' idea is a great plot point when you're writing about psychics. I like writing about empaths - you can do so much with them! - and this is a concept that I use a lot. I enjoyed the story. :)

Great story! It all makes sense now, when Nathan and Wendy were in the garden lab for want of a better word, she was projecting her feelings and he was picking up on them, thinking they came from him. Nice touch!

Lynn

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Well, you know I have to love this. Any story with Nathan and Kristin is always up my alley...you know that! And, I think you're right about Wendy. I really liked the telepath theory too since it's true. And, I loved, loved, loved the scene at the end.

So, I really hate to nitpick on a wonderful story like this (really, it's true), but there was one slight error I cannot overlook: Nathan's grandson was named Michael, not Matthew.

But other than that, I LOVED this. Thank you so much. Now, I'm even more excited for the next Wave Over Wave chapter. I don't want to complain, but get that darn thing written already...lol. Alright, alright, I'll be patient. :)