You said paseley but it is actually parsley.

This was soooooooooo good! But does she get the White Rose back?

I love this story now. Positively love it. There are some plot-ish type holes but I'm willing to overlook them because your writing is smart and creative. A lot of the things that happen are things I wouldn't expect. I'm happy to keep reading!

Okay... does she have the same curse as the rest of the pirates but not the creepy skeleton part? Is she blessed by Calypso in some way? What the shizznips?

There are some consistency errors in your story. They weren't on the Pearl when she fell off (at least, I don't think so). And I want to know what she has to do with Calypso and why she's so all knowing and knew when the perfect time was.

SUSPENSE! I can't wait to continue. I also wanted to add that maybe you should have condensed the chapters down some.

I love this story so far. I love your character and I love the interactions with all of the characters that you've brought into the story so far. However... I am confused about their ages at the moment. At first I thought they teens because Jack is on his father's ship... but then you said that Jack has a ship. Maybe that should have been explained better, just mentioning whether he was a boy, a teen or a man? Also, I feel like everything happened too fast. One minute they met and the next they couldn't be together and then she was bawling in the captains quarters because Jack "lied to her". It was just too fast. Even saying that she'd decided to stay/had been allowed to stay on the ship and had been with them for a month would have at least alluded to Jack and her becoming closer. Then maybe some more lovey-dovey stuff to make the "I wish we could be together" part a bit easier to swallow. ALSO... I'm sorry for picking at your story so much. I still love your story and I can't wait to see what happened/s.

I really love your story.

I love this chapter.

Nice chapter.

Good first chapter.

AMAZING STORY! I just LOVED Scarlet and her story so far! After this, I plan to go straight to the sequel!

Amazing story.

I would never be a pirate, I would keep singing 'Hoist the Colours' under my breath.

You could write your chapter on paper, then post it when you get Internet. Also, you write in first person, then you say Jack handed the apple to SCARLET, who took a bite..., I don't think scarlet refers to herself in the third person like Elmo. Do you?