I like it! I love how seifer is already whipped. Ah good ol squall. I don't think it was a problem that it went so fast. Life has a way of throwing us moments that can change everything if acted apon. Anywho keep up the good work!

That was a hot one :D good job! Though it needs a little spell and grammar checking ;)

An interesting start...

Could use some editing, and perhaps a little reconstruction in the way of plot (maybe, not guaranteed; it depends on how the rest of the story goes).

Good job on the smut/yaoi/boy love/whatever you want to call it, although perhaps more time could be taken for at least a few later scenes? And...Squall having been with Rinoa when the one he wanted to be with was Seifer... If you ask me, that could only work if he was drunk when he hooked up with her, because Squall's the kind of person who isolates himself when he's feeling down, not the kind to find another person to date because his lover/crush is suddenly supposedly an enemy. Of course, that's only my opinion, and this is your story. But feedback is a wonderful thing.

I hope that if you do decide to continue this, you give it the attention it deserves and make it a work of art in its own right.

May the words just flow,

Cuzosu

I really enjoyed the story. I hope you can add more later on and nurture this plot bunny. Cute story!