Very nice, I love how you capture the emotions of each character. Thank you

I almost can't believe that you just read the Chronicles of Narnia. They were a part of my childhood and still are my favorite books. I learned to read with them. Welcome, lol. I think we all cried at the end of The Last Battle.

This fic is adorable. You wrote the reactions of the characters quite well. I especially loved Edmund's part. He was always my favorite character. I always felt he needed more acknowledgement.

This is an excellent first foray into Narnia fic! Well done! Your renderings of all four were very nicely done. Folks take a lot of different approaches here and I like that yours is heavier on the understanding and acceptance without the buckets of angst.

As for your a/n about Susan, oh the Problem of Susan. There are many, many different ways of approaching that story and not all of them end with Susan forgetting Narnia.

Not bad, I liked it! :)

~Psyche