hmm.. I'm still reading this as I give my review. But I have to speak my mind... (Please bear with me.)

So far, I'm having a hard time to find any of this to be, well... Genuine. I mean, yes, the Marriage Law is a big deal, and having to fulfill whatever the Law's wishes are surely puts a lot of pressure to everyone involved.
But you're jumping from one scene to the next too fast that none of us barely had time to reel in the events, the emotions; you're pointing out the main parts of this story that we couldn't find the sense of adventure in all this.

'How did they feel?', 'What are their thoughts on this?', 'How will this affect our future?'. Good enough that you are able to answer these questions. Yet, it's also good if you take time to describe more of how the characters are feeling and doing. Just like back in the previous chapters when Hermione and Fred first spoke after a long while to finally come to terms that they are getting married. You're implying that both sides are unsure, which is good, then I thought you would get into detail when they spoke. But then you quickly pulled the gun and just have him bring out the ring he bought and asked her to marry him. I didn't quite feel he was nervous (if ever that was your approach).

All I'm saying is that you need to bring more life. Your first 3 chapters were actually doing well. I love how you presented a frustrated and angry soon-to-be Mr. and Mrs. Fred Weasley (Who wouldn't feel displeased with a certain Rita Skeeter?). Take your time in addressing issues and feelings. You have limitless space to write on and just type in the words like you mean it.

Don't hold back.

As much as I love reading, a good critique has to be present in order to help aspiring authors like you and I to further improve ourselves. I will continue reading and will also read the Sequel. Please don't feel discouraged or displeased with me... This story has potential. And although it is already complete, I am just pin-pointing out what areas need improving to help you for your future works. I hope you see where I'm coming from.

I'll see you in the finish line:)

Okay I just have to say that I love that you named one of the children tahlulah, that happens to be my daughter's name just spelled as Tallulah _

Nice job...sad chapter...

Hello! I just wanted to say that this story was wonderful. I loved it and couldn't stop reading it. Thanks for posting it and writing it so we could read it. Have a great day and night.

Loved this story! Great plot well written and really enjoyed your ED scene. One quick thing on that is the defibrillator won't work if the heart doesn't have a shockable rhythm (if the heart has stopped it won't work, in fact it is very rarely able to be used, I work in an Emergency department in Australia) but the rest of the scene was amazing in how it was approached. Great job

Wow, what a chapter. As a nurse in the U.S. I can tell you that you did a great job writing the code blue scene. Very realistic.

I'm loving this so much! the fact that Ron isn't going ballistic over Hermione and Fred makes me happy because i love seeing everyone happy :)

Really sad hermiones dad didn't get to meet his grand child, in FF stories it's always her parents who die, whys it never Molly or Arthur?

Cute! Good work!

Molly Georgiana and Lucy Magdalena Weasley were born

Fleur and Bill had victoire

Percy and Audrey are having a baby

Fred and hermione had sexin their wedding night

Fred and Hermione have newborn son

Hermiones dad died so sad