Love it

The story is actually really good and I find the characters interesting. I even like Sasuke, who is behaving pretty badly throughout the story. I sort of pity him because he's basically been forced into everything he's been doing by parents who don't want him to be gay. I also like Naruto who, while attracted to Sasuke, actually has some genuine loyalty for his sister and doesn't like what Sasuke is doing. I think I would have been pissed if he'd thrown her under the bus and just decided to go for it with Sasuke. (That actually would have made him worse than Sasuke.)

However, I'm not so keen on the writing style. I think you were trying way too hard to make your writing sound formal in this and that resulted in quite a few awkward phrases. Here's just two, as an example:

"Speedily putting back on their choice of wear"

["choice of wear"? For goodness' sake, why not "clothing"? A better way to have phrased this would have been "quickly got dressed." Three words in the place of eight. This sentence didn't need to be written in such an arcane way since it was describing a simple action.]

"Sasuke briefly peered through the corner of his eye at the one whom had voiced the question"

["at the one whom had voiced the question" is just an awkward mouthful. You should have combined this sentence with the one that followed it and had Sasuke peering through the corner of his eye at his girlfriend, Ino. It would have been understood she was the only one who could have asked the question in that scene since she was the only one in the car with Sasuke.]

i thought this fic was A-MAZING! :D

Why is this a two stories instead of one?

And here I was thinking that Sasuke would have broken up with Ino and this story would have had a clean, sweet ending with Sasuke and Naruto. ...in this case I am so glad that that didn't happen! I'm looking forward to reading the sequel and you did a great job with this story.

thank you very much

this and cant wait for more

OMG This is amazing. I have to read the sequel btw i lol'd at "She was showing signs of a 'bitch in heat'" XD

HOOOOOOLLLLLLLYYYYYY CRAAAAAAAA- *dies*

OH MY GOD. OH MY GOD. I NEED THE SEQUEL. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PRODUCE IT FROM YOUR WONDERFUL BRAIN AS QUICKLY AS POSSIBLE BECAUSE I MIGHT ACTUALLY EXPLODE. THIS IS LIKE THE BEST FANFICTION OF MY LIFE, AND I HAVE READ ALMOST EVERY SASUKE AND NARUTO FANFICTION ON THE INTERNET. LITERALLY, I LOVE YOU BECAUSE YOU ARE GENIUS AND THIS IS BEAUTIFUL BUT I. AM. DIEING. FANGIRL HEART ATTACK, STRAIGHT UP. SEQUEL! I CAN'T WAIT.

*falls out of chair* HOLY CRAP! NARUTO'S A FUCKING SNEAKY GENIUS! Here I was thinking Sasuke was going to be the usual but NO! NARUTO IS FUCKING AMAZING! You made me shit my pants more than I should! XD

THIS IS SUCH A GREAT STORY!

uhm why would you remove a story if your not sure if " " will remove it... and if is going to remove the story then let them... why bother removing your own story. let them remove it... and if they don't that just means its okay for your story to be on this site... /

i like your story by the way... and i hope it has sa sequel. D

I. LOVE. This!

It's so well written! The story is amazing, the characters are IN character, and over-all, It's definitely got me hooked. I can't wait for the sequel. :] Awesome job!

Sequelize-a continuation of an awesome story.

Ok now you do an example :D

I love this fic! Cant wait for sequel.