These sort of prequel fics are generally awesome and yours is no exception. They show the potential for some great Infinite Loop style fics, too.

should be more focused on bobby and uni think you could write the next chapter being focused on those two?

Diana is pretty amazing. I knew she was cool to begin with, but she's not really 17 is she? I thought she was the same age as Presto, and Sheila.

Poor Bobby. I hope he'll be alright. I'm more conerned on Sheila's reaction when she finds out.

Well, that's something. Presto has a crush on Diana? That's cute! Didn't see that one coming. Wonder who'll I will read about next.

This is very interesting. I was wondering why we didn't see how Hank and the others, got to the realm and how they were given this reason to get back home while dealing with a dark sorcerer. I'm gonna keep reading this. Good job!

This was good.I enjoyed reading it.

Really enjoyed this- the backstory for each of the kids, the events both here and in the Realm prior to the kids' arrival, Venger's mysterious dual nature, and seeing the trip to the Realm from the inside-all very well done. This is going on the favorites.

I really, really like this. Perfect amount of humour, mystery, and all-around ordinary life going's-ons. Anyway, I also love how you flesh out the characters but *at the same time* are able to keep exactly the same dialogue and actions that are in the cartoon. Amazing-love it!

"Sheila," Eric's voice entered into her reverie.

"Yes, Eric?" she replied contentedly.

"Your marshmallow's on fire."

Aha! I think _that_ was the true reason for the 7th marshmallow. Presto and/or his hat is (are?) prescient, you know. _

Kinda sad to be at the end already...it seems like we haven't gone much of anywhere yet! Still, it does feel like a good pausing point. The story _is_ called "Beginnings" after all, and it's undeniably the end of the beginning.

I had a fun time reading. Thank you.

Arrrgggh, for the life of me, I can't remember Sunna. Maybe something in the next chapter will jog my memory... but as it is, all I can comment on right now (yay, nitpicking again) is that there seem to be an unusual number of missing commas in this chapter. (at least, missing from where I would put them)...maybe FFN was messing with you; I know it sometimes pulls that kind of stuff on me.

A couple examples from the first paragraph or so:

"She was young, no more than twenty and she was dressed..." - I'd have put a comma after "twenty" because that's the end of the phrase relating back to "young" (her age) and the start of a new one about how she's dressed.

"Her bare feet, stained black with grime were shackled..." - For the same reason as above, I'd have put a comma after "grime" since that's the end of the phrase relating back to her feet and the start of a new one about the chains.

Also the very first sentence: "The circular room at the top of the tower was windowless and dark, a dim black candle upon a rough wooden table provided the only illumination." - the comma after "dark" should actually be a semi-colon instead, because it separates what could be two complete sentences each with their own subject and verb.

Onward to the...last chapter?

Heh, poor Eric. Seriously, he slept in his armor? I bet he has some interesting dents after doing that...still, it probably felt a lot safer to just keep it on. Plus, maybe he wouldn't even have known _how_ to get it back on, and wouldn't _that_ have been a nice situation?

One thing I'm a bit confused on, though - When Sheila gets back to the cave...I'm pretty sure she's still invisible because she's invisible later when Eric falls on her. So...how did Hank realize she returned, enough to be able to direct conversation at her? And especially, how could Sheila and Hank "look at each other and nearly burst out laughing" at Eric? It'd also have been hard for her to help Eric in the first place if he couldn't see her...right? I know I'd be startled if somebody invisible suddenly grabbed my arm, even if they were trying to help support it.

Unless...Sheila _had_ been visible when she returned to the cave and talked with Hank and started helping Eric, but when she fell down under Eric and bumped her head, the fall or the bump also somehow raised her hood, thereby bringing the invisibility into effect again?

Well, either way, that factor is something that could maybe be made clearer in this chapter.

I greatly enjoyed Sheila and Hank's talk though. It explained a lot in a reasonable way, and hmm...foreshadowing, with the "search" vs "find" part...? _

And so the leader is chosen. Yeah, people never really think about how something like that can change and put a strain on relationships...you really brought that out. I was half-expecting Eric to put up a bit more fight (not over being the leader himself, but about having to choose one at all, and furthermore actually swear fealty), but then again it _is_ Hank and not some stranger, plus the seriousness of the situation no doubt was hitting him.

One nit-picky thing here... At the end there, when DM says "I am Dungeon master," I'm thinking the "M" in "master" ought to be capitalized, as it's part of his title. Just a thought.

Also, for some reason I've got it in my head that Venger's steed had six legs instead of just four. You know, like Sleipnir? I tried to find a pic on my DVD case again, but no luck this time. It only shows Venger's face, not his mount. So I don't know, I guess. _

Hahahaha, sorry, I'm not laughing at your story, I'm just being nostalgic. It's just that, in all these shows and movies when the "bad guys" are after the "good guys" and are firing zillions of times at them...the bad guys never seem to be able to hit the broad side of a barn, but the good guys nearly always hit key spots whenever they do get shots off, and that still holds true here. Good to know some things never change. _

At least this time, we can use Hank's arrow as an excuse for Tiamat's pathetic failure to aim. Good thing those weapons are powerfully magical, or I wouldn't believe one arrow could do even that much damage against a six-story-tall creature with presumable armor plating. (Hey, it's the dragon's softer underside, I get it.)

But yes, what now? Onward!