This story needs Cliff Notes.

Sorry for the lack of reviews. I forgot to check my FF account for a while. I find this development to be quite interesting. I'm curious how the connection between Ron and Suriel will play out.

Ok seriously, this has gone on long enough, kim legitimately cared aboutt ron before she was affected by that machine, she hated that people thought less of him, hated that the world always tried to bring him down, she loved that man. Your hurting both ron and kim by doing this. Ron obviously because kim keeps shutting him down and being mean and hanging with another guy and being gullible because she lost her memories and doesnt know better, and your hurting kim because when she finally gets her memories back, shes gonna be destroyed. She hurt the person she truly loves so much and if ron cant forgive her for it or if he does forgive her and yet no longer has any feelings for her then shes gonna die on the inside, everyones in the comment sections taking ron side and for good reason but think about kim, at the end of this she might lose everything

Yooooooooo. I cant believe you finished this wild tale

WHAT THE HELL MAN

Yaaaaaaaas I’m sorry but she deserved to have the crap beat out of her. But that little moment at the end was so sweet ugh I just want her to remember already!

Well Book 1 is finally in the books, as it were... I'll just get right in to the Review(s)...

1. So was that like 'Auto Writing' with Josh? Kinda like 'Auto Painting'? I woulda never pegged Artsy-boy as a Medium...
2. Heh... I still chuckle at some of the names you use for goons. (IE: Reggie Voorhees)...
3. Also, I always like reading about Ron leaving a blood-bath...
4. Umm... wait... I thought Wade knew about Ron's Naco financed millions? Or did he lie to Umestsu?
5. Lastly, Ron must not have been concentrating hard enough to almost get stabbed in the heart. I have a feeling he will live, but barely.
(BTW... Have I mentioned how much I dislike Eric? How about writing me in as a 'Guest Hero' who get's a hit on the basta... err... guy)

As always, looking forward the next chap... or wait... Now it's Book Eye Eye...
whitem...

You are evil, you know that don't you!? Pure evil. The MOTHER of all cliffhangers! And ... SIX MONTHS?! Are you SERIOUS!? Dang ... what to do? ... I guess I'll have to read some other stories, wait for Jimmy and MrDrP and the Captain to post new chapters, go back through the archives again (I'm just starting 2009 again) ... well, I guess it won't be too bad, and ... SIX MONTHS?! Are you SERIOUS!?

I DON'T WANT TO WASTE TIME ON OTHER STORIES WHILE MAIN STORYLINE IS GOING NO FUCKING WHERE! WTF MAN, IT'S LIKE ross and Rachel bullshit, stretched for 10 seasons for no apparent reason. it's okay if ron kim doesn't works out but the excitement wore off thousands and thousands of words ago! cut the crap and focus on 'moving' the actual plot. i'm tired.

fuck this old cunt and his prophecy, forcing Ron with bitch kim. she was never a good friend to begin with. you protect your friends, not ditch them again and again.

I am sorry but i dont think that i will read what you write from now your stories are veri well written and very good with solid plot and well written if a little cliche character i dont like the fact that you put the main heroes though so much before you get them toghether and also i dont like that in all of your stories you make Ron to be the one who give up on his happines for Kim and when Kim came back or realise after she was hurt by her love interes that Ron is her "great love" Ron just simple forgive her for all the pain and hurt she cause him and he take her excuse for that is that because of his power he receive only one shot at happines and that is with i think that if his power decide his mate he should be aware if his mate behavior is influenced somewho and he will try to find if is power is not able to say why is potential mate is behaving like that I think that is power will help or even influence him to find another mate to make sure that he has offsprings and the power is pased one and not dying with him in a move to preserve it is alive enough to choose and help a "choosen one" I think that she is alive enough to not die because her choosen one didnt have any offspring to pase the genetic makeup who allow someone to acces and control the power.
Also in this story I really dont like how you make Ron like a sclave or eager puppy to Kim. No matter what Kim did Ron is ready to sacrifice his health happines and even life for this time Kim didnt even achnolege Ron fellings and continue to go about her is more like abuse of highest order then love or friendship.
Also that in all of your stories you have Ron and Kim break up for any reason plausibile or not and Ron sacrifice his health and/or happines for Kim and he is ready any moment to forgive Kim and take her back no matter what she did or who much had hurt him is becaming boring and repetitive.
Also in this story you take the action of Ron parents to after this Ron will forgive them then is clearly the weakest man that it is and a doormat and he deserve anything he receive and all the hurt and abuse he get from Kim,his parent and everyone else.
And for him to hide his abilities for Kim sake even after they became a couple look more like a master sclave or dog relation that a true couple relation where the parteners are Kim feel treaten by Ron abilities then she is not his best friend,partener in the field and most definitive is not his look more like his master or boss no partener of BF/GF.
Sorry about my rewiev but this is how your stories make me feel.I am not going to read 1mil words just to see Ron treated like and emotional punchingbag and to see him sacrifice everything for someone who dosent give him back even half of became boring after a time.

Oh no I can’t wait for the 2nd book

Last chapter? Well, I suppose that 26,000 words in one counts as a chapter, but it kept me up way too late last night listening to it. LOL.

You can post a review on your own story, right? If I could be so bold as to ask that in a week or so, post a review with the review comments that you normally post in the top of the next chapter.

For the story, it had lots of action and less cluelessness(Kim) and raw angst(Ron) than usual, so that was nice. Kim needs a lesson in Operations Security, I mean really, telling someone over the phone where her next mission is going to be? Wade needs to learn some attitude from Ron. He let the Interpol guy walk all over him. I certainly hope that Ron (or representative) pays that guy a visit.

Josh's story is turning out to be interesting. 'A painting prophet' - I think that is pretty novel.

The whole part of Ron committing suicide seemed pointless - I can't imagine Ron failing to protect Kim and surviving whatever happened. Even if he wasn't there, I expect that his vengeance would leave a trail of bodies ending in his own.

The ending. Holy Cow. Ok, I assume that since Kim didn't collapse when Ron did, that taking off the pendant broke their mystical connection. The bad guys have the real pendant, I wonder if that will come back to bite them. I also wonder it Yamanouchi will rethink its policy on training exhausted Chosen Ones with live steel.

The one positive note in this whole disaster is that Kimmy's college application will be trashed. That means, when the blood, smoke, and tears clears up sometime in Book Three, she won't be enrolled anywhere which might pave the way for them going to school together.

Bravo Sentinel!

Thanks for the story.

Book 1's in the books...ain't it...?

But a hell of a stopping point before the avalanche of misery that Ron's life will become...courtesy of a smug chameleon and his team.

Bloody mission, bloody ending of a chapter.

I hope Ron can make good on Wade's threat to Inspector Capon (and Chicken, is his name-o) before things go too far south for the boy.

Though his 'presence' wasn't known to be on Jones' island, Ron sent a message that others will realize when he finally visits those who hurt Kim and set Eric/Hans at them.

But first, those dominoes from hell Eric setup for Ron are starting to fall...

CB73

That was a *mean* place to end this, and if I didn't know better I'd think the whole thing was deliberate (on Ron's part; its a given the Great Author would choose that particular moment to finish)

Well, its been quite a ride, and the next (reviewer does some quick calculations) 24 weeks are going to be absolute *AGONY* while we wait for book 2. My compliments to the Great Author; you've managed to make what was old fresh again, and do so without jettisoning canon completely. No small feat given what there was to work with beforehand.

I still say the Euro-scum, Idiot One, Idiot Two, and every adult over a certain age in Middleton (and absent the names Possible, Stoppable, King, and one or two others) should all die horrible and bloody deaths. Gods but I hate these guys, and I'm not one to waste energy on such things.

Anyways, expect periodic PMs and abject pleading to whatever the god of time is for June 2018 to get here faster.

Cheers, and well done.