i wish there was a like button as i have nothing i can say that you can use to improve you're writeing, i think your brilliant

I love poems, so I enjoyed reading this. I like the style of it. Was simple, yet complex at the same time.

Also, the idea of the lifestream becoming Cloud's hell makes sense. Like most things, it is what you make of it. Even if it isn't hell to others, it may be hell to you.