This is awesome!

I like how you wrote that. It really let you inside his head. They was really interesting and you could easily see the different layers and many thoughts that made Tobias. Great job!

Always Curious,
-Jo

Hahn! Perfect! Love this so much, great work.

I love this !
Nice job... you're a great writer

You give Tobias a good voice. With this fandom's fanfics, we need more of yours. :)

Words can not describe how much I love this. If I could do more than favorite, I would. I think you captured his character perfectly! Bravo!

Must I first say- I've never; never; read a fanfic, where it was fully written in second character pov. I was really worried in the beginning- if you were able to control the writing in that pov, but... my goodness, you are amazing! This was brilliant! It wasn't exactly the thought-frame that I imagined Four having... but it seems realistic. It was funny. And I have to admit, a little creepy in the final few paragraphs... But you managed to just... connect everything, and make it... your own little one-shot. It was really good. And don't worry, can't you tell I'm rambling now as well? Sorry about that. Overall, I'm adding this to my favourites.

This is amazing. I liked it a lot!

All I can say is that this was simply brilliant. It flowed really nicely and seemed realistic. I didn't imagine Four's pov to sound like this, but as I read it I decided it's absolutely perfect.

Caleb was cool, but then I didn't like him after reading Insurgent.

I know this is hardly one scene, but honestly, this is the best Divergent fanfiction I've read... I wish I could write half as good as you. Keep writing. :)

I loved this. I hope you do write more!

I enjoyed this. Hope you write more Divergent fic.

This is amazing! You're one of the few writers who can write in second person and still somehow make it sound good. You really captured Four's character. Congratulations, and we need more writers like you1

Omygawshers. This. I can't.

This is brilliant. I love the kind of POV you got going on and all. Four is one of my favorite characters here, too. :3

I have a feeling that this book will be a popular, proper fandom soon. with plenty more fans and such. Yeah, pardon my wording.

Anyway, good job. :)