Finished in one go. This is really a good story. I keep on wishing this is longer. Thank you so much for sharing this awesome story of yours. Will head to your profile for kore of your stories ️

beautiful loved it one of the best thanks for sharing :)

Hi there! I first favorited your story years ago because I fell in love with it. Everything about it was so skillfully written (personally I find that the only flaws with your story were very slight grammar errors that hardly bothered me at all). I reread it recently this past week and was pleasantly reminded why it is never leaving my favorites list. This story is everything I've come to hope for in a fanfiction. Your lovingly crafted AU, the totally realistic portrayals of Squalo and Xanxus (they do not seem ooc to me just so you know), the plot that had me hanging on the edge of my seat the whole time...
What you wrote played through my mind like a beautiful movie as I was reading, and I found myself wishing that someone somewhere would have the same idea. If this became a movie I would watch it in a heartbeat, over and over again. I love the way you portray Xanxus in this tale. He is fiery and strong, while at the same time hiding a deep swell of emotion within him. I believe that he has more than just ire in his soul, and I also believe that his few 'sappy' moments as you call them are justifiable and explainable. Even he might feel something akin to love underneath his rough, tough exterior. It comes out more often as a subtle form of hard-earned respect and usually Squalo is the only one to see it, which would be so true. You showed that very well.
Also, this may be a little bit random, but every time you made Xanxus say to Squalo in answer to a question, 'No reason', I thought of The Princess Bride movie. That scene where Westley admitted that what he was really saying to Princess Buttercup every time he said 'As you wish' was 'I love you'. I liked to imagine that whenever Xanxus said that, he was indirectly telling the shark that he loved him. I know that's probably not what you intended, but I just thought I'd bring it up.
I love your writing, and I want you to know that your story inspires me to write to the best of my ability. I'm hard on myself when I write too, and anything that I don't love when I'm done I don't post. But I'm glad that you wrote this piece. It was a breath of fresh air! I hope that you decide to write more XS stories one day.

Whoa.

I'm absolutely, totally, completely speechless.
It was so beautiful. I easily can say that all your work was fucking worth it. The background, characters (by the way, your Xanxus isn't out of character at all, to me, just very expensive) (we all know he silently cares as hell when it comes to the shitty shark), that fight from freedom, that not-black-nor-white world... You moved me. You incredibly moved me down to the spine.

Thank you for that. You deserve love, happiness, and mountains of potatoes, OK? Don't ever doubt what I just said.

(I'm French so if I made some mistakes I'm deeply sorry!)

OmG, that was absolutely /amazing/. I couldn't stop reading it. Seriously, every chance I had I turned on my computer and read more and more. I sincerely thank you for distracting my mind from college.
Best Ass Story

I absolutely loved your fanfiction! It was one of the best I read (and I did read IDespiseTragedy: 'Eromenos' wich was totally awesome.) So, thanks for the fic! :D

Hello there! I would like to congratulte you for the criative story!

Its fuckin 2:00 in the morning and I have a shitty social studies test tommorow but I don't care. Ur shit, well its not shit, is pretty damned amazing though I was originally looking for a smut fic I ended up reading this hella long of a XS fanfic for 4 hrs. Shits amazing

Plz have this published while just changing names or somethin

Wow u have talent!

You deserve a good, elaborate review.

Let me get the bad points, as a reader, out of the way: You talk way too much. So much that there is a lack of suspense. I guess it is another way of saying that "you're telling me too much". Lots of narration, lack of commas and peroids, the sentence subjects not connecting, and some parts I felt that weren't needed.

"He decided to force some words out of his mouth"
"Squalo gave a grin, which wasn't returned."
"he didn't lock Xanxus in the previoux box like the previous victim, but instead..."
"Luss gasped audibly"
"His red eyes were open, hearing everything, but he decided not to get involved'. Also, perhaps when Squalo's servants are first explained?

What's with the tilde?! ALSO, "Eyes orbs"!

Other than that, I like this! Definitely. And it wasn't all that uncomfortable in terms of format. I made it through the first chapter and liked it. Especially since the ancestors of the real Mafia were against oppression in Italy, so this alternative seem to really fit. Even better that I love the Varia, especially Xan and Squalo. And sorry Squalo, but you did sound cheesy. Lol. I think it's cool that Squalo is against Vongola first, so now I get to see if/how he joins Xanxus and the Vongola.

Now, there's Xan and Squalo. Squalo's empathy towards Xan is interesting, without it being too "mushy" (least until the ENDING!). I think it is sensible, and I'm glad because I seem to keep getting sucked into smut and PWP fics with this kind of writing.

Hmmm, not sure what to say about Xan and Squalo being nice to one another near the end (especially XAN), not after what's been read. Okay okay, why not? They can't be throwing crap at each other all the time I guess, and no one is watching. They trust each other the most in canon.

I have to say that I definitely enjoyed reading this story. The AU you created is absolutely amazing and it was easy to get into right away with no confusing points or facts about it. Despite the fact you say your language is plain and unsophisticated, I felt that it was written nicely and I didn't have to worry about hardly used vocabulary that I wouldn't know the meaning of. The plot progressed smoothly and it didn't feel like it had anything unnecessary. Despite a kinda sappy Xanxus, I liked the progression of his an Squalo' s relationship. Overall, it's a nicely done story.

WOAH THIS FIC IS AWESOME. I'M SORRY I COULDN'T COME EARLIER AND READ THIS BUT YOU ARE AMAZING TO THE EXTREME AND YOUR WRITING IS ALSO EXTREMELY BEAUTIFUL AS WELL.

Don't put yourself down! You're awesome to the EXTREME, haha!

I cannot begin to convey how much I loved this story. Your plot and au was so well thought out and your characters- even the villians like Taros- had something that made you feel a bit of remorse and sympathy for them. They weren't just another "kill for fun" antagonist. You did good!

This is awesome! Especially the part where lussuria died that was sort of angsty and I really like Xanxus and squallo's relationship here...and I do feel sad that Spanner died...