"That's one way of putting it." I don't usually make comments about my own characters in my reviews, because I don't believe it's nice, but for this I just have to say this, Emily really reminded me here a lot of Valerie. She's using the flippancy and double entendres(words), and her sexuality as a way to protect herself, and hide herself behind that facade, a front. But it's also a part of her, I think, but I think I realized what you meant when you said she said later the producers kinda used her and made her sexualized herself more. I hope during the story she will find a middle ground, become much more familiar and comfortable with her own self. For that end, her confession how she was affected by her early elimination was also good as she showed 'herself', her own vulnerability, but it also took me a little surprise, I wouldn't have guessed she would have admitted it this easily, she also has some ego, but it also made it quite clear that she thought him more than a quick 'therapy' as it was obvious to us with the repetition of 'get on the plane, get on the plane.' It's rather sad that Damian didn't know it, of course. But he realized, I think, that was more, as he had told her, too. It was good that he told her that, too, told her even 'she would be even enough.' That's the kind of the things she needed to hear more for her self-esteem.
I liked that Damian didn't balk out of going out with her, you see, just for that reason :) He didn't think the audience might backfire on him. I believe that's another thought for that age famous people, they need to be extra careful with whom they date, or never date anyone because their fangirls don't like it. I am not sure exactly how Damian is famous now, but I kinda guess he's little by your PMs.

The scent thing, aromas was fabulous, but you already know I have a thing for that, too :p
The moment where they exchanged gifts was so sweet. I like this notions of couples exchanging random things for gifts or mementos to each other, things wouldn't have make any meaning other than themselves, and you played with it here exceptionally well. Especially, Emily's gift. Good for Woody ;) (And seriously, I didn't notice it before, but, Woody? Reallly, it's so dirty, ha ha.)
And that cad driver! Lucky dog. He got a free show.

"A gentleman too." Heh, now, you know what this reminded me, right? He he :D A gentleman with a sly smile and a sly wink. I bet Emily will return soonest. She's beat by the bug.

Ha ha, yes, this must have been very therapeutic for Damian. I liked again how causally but directly she said this wasn't a date, but a "therapy" to help him out, to take his steam off, and with this extraordinary situation I think it was suited very well. She didn't try to paint it like anything else, only making sure that she liked him as a "man".
The point she raised was interesting. I don't know about these characters but the way she talked about him seemed to me too much assuming, a bit pretentious, painting herself as a woman of the world and him naive. Perhaps she was right, and I feel like she was, but I'm not if it was tactful. But when cone to think of it nothing with this hook up was tactful, right? But head to the point, so I guess that was also normal too.
It was good to see her weaknesses, too, the way she felt for not having a chance to sign with Damian on the show. And the request was telling. I wouldn't have expected hearing that from her. She has some ego.
The choices of songs were funny. Especially the "she gets too hungry" he he. Liked the playful banter, too.

Well, wow, that must be the most-truthful hooking up I've ever seen. Yup, Samuel is definitely a good friend. I'm not sure if I can follow why they need him relaxed on the show to get more success because how would that help to make their own career, but I guess it's a hope, and one of the things I know about the people who participate shows like that is that they are hopeful. So I think it makes sense, uh, in their heads. But seriously it would have just made much more sense acting like she was "just" passing in the neighborhood, as hard as to believe. At least, it would be less awkward.
I think though you dealt remarkably well with such a novel idea, his astonishment was realistic, and I liked that she made it perfectly clear it was her idea too, and she wanted it, wanted him, as long as he is a fun person to hang around.

I find it interesting that he’s taking note of her gate number. I hope that means he’s going after her. I like that he kissed her after the song was over. It was really sweet. It’s cute the way that Damian says he’s a proper Californian and that he’s been working out. I like that he’s going to show her off to the world as his girl. That should be a confidence boost for her. I thought there was a reason you mentioned that he kept the phone face up when he placed it on the table, but it looks like there really wasn’t a point. I was hoping she might catch a text message or something. I like that she’s having a hard time leaving him. It’s really sweet. I like how no matter how much she’s trying she can’t seem to want him. I mean, they talk about their family and work and how they grew up. That was really cute. Oh so the phone did have something to do with it. I’m glad. I wasn’t expecting the way this ended but I liked that they didn’t get together. I thought that was a neat twist.

I think it’s funny that he has a Cowboy Woody doll. Oh gosh. I do find it weird that she’s like a sex therapist. I’m hoping that it develops into something more. I find the dynamics of their get together interesting. He wants to hang out and she’s telling him that he won’t be able to handle her. It sounds like a challenge. I think he needs to influence her. That could be good for his recovery. So he’s fighting with her because she’s bisexual? This is rated T? I’m awfully surprised because I’m sure that this goes into M. I like the fact they talk about the show and bring that back. It was nice to have them both talk about how they viewed each other. So, are they going to sing the next chapter? Or is it going to be her leaving? I like that he’s honoring her request to sing duets because she didn’t get to do that. I’ll be interested to see how this ends.

So this takes place after the season ended. I like that it’s Samuel going over to Damian’s house with Emily. I like Samuel and Damian. I think the way he’s taking care of her is really sweet. I like that this is from Samuel’s perspective. Well it was before the head hops. I rather like his perspective though. I feel bad because it sounds like he’s going to be the third wheel. He might need that taxi waiting down below. Why is she immediately lecturing him? That was a little annoying. I like that she seems to be concerned about herself. She’s telling the two of them not to screw up because she wants to be on the show. That’s realistic. Poor, poor Samuel. He’s totally the third wheel. I feel really bad and it makes this entire scene really awkward. The sexy comment was awkward. Wait… She agreed to be a booty call? This… O…kay… I can’t see Sam setting this up. Maybe another person, but Sam’s a weird choice. It’s also weird that they would come up with this knowing her past. Well, this was interesting. I wonder where it goes.

LOL...I guess I should have read this one first since this is where it all began, huh? Oh, well, so I'm sort of going backwards. :P

Anyway, it was really interesting to see how Emily acted in the beginning. It was kind of funny how she lectured Damian right away. I love how he wasn't sure what to really say. I absolutely love how they both have a thing for each other, but they're too shy to say. I love how Emily sort of covers it up by telling him he needs to make sure he does well on the show...but then she realizes she's a little too enthusiastic. That was cute.

I love how she finally makes the first move and tells him he needs to ask her to stay. That was sweet. I love how Damian has some dreams about her as well. This was really lovely and I look forward to the next chapter.

Well cone. :)

And here we are at chapter two. You know, I’m really quite glad that I’ve been able to read the second chapter so soon after the first because it means that the details and feelings you invoke during the first chapter are still fresh in my mind, and that makes reading this story so much more enjoyable. Now why don’t we get to the actual review, huh? C:

Once again, I’m a little disappointed at the lack of description throughout this chapter but I do understand that this story is some of your older work on and it isn’t going to be the same as your newer work. I’m okay with that because I feel that the lack of description works extremely well here, there isn’t a lot that needs to be described in great detail. As a whole what you have written, the dialogue, the scene, so on and so forth, paints a very clear picture about what has happened and what could still happen.

Your dialogue, grammar and sentence structure is perfect – no surprise there. Everything flowed together beautifully and felt so natural for these two characters that as I read this chapter, and the previous one, I could see the scene taking place in my head. And that, my dear, is a testimony to your skill as a writer.

Naturally your characterization for these two is spot on and wonderfully written, and I found the lovey-dovey comments about their duet to be the icing on the cake.

Another fantastic job!

I decided to read this story, as you suggested, so that I understand “It’ll happen”” better and while I personally don’t think it is as good as you later work, it is still really enjoyable and very well written. So far the story comes across at sweet and fluffy and as one can expect, everything flows together quiet well. The dialogue feels natural and like something these character would actually say, and the characterization is perfect in my opinion.

However, I will admit that I was a little disappointed as the lack of description throughout this chapter – I happen to love full blown descriptions – and it’s evident in some of your other works that you are very good at doing description. I want to suggest that you add some it but I get the feeling that it would disrupt to overall flow of the story so I’ll just have to deal. :/

Overall you have done another fantastic job! I really enjoyed reading the first chapter. :)

Only fair that I finish reviewing this one :D

This is a nice conclusion to your- well, I guess you'd call it a three-shot :)

I like that you open it like a movie- cutting into the scene of Damian getting dressed. There's a nice simplicity to your descriptions here that I find refreshing- you're not overdoing it.

The "duet" bit didn't translate well for me, but then I wouldn't have expected it to. It's an aural medium and next door to impossible to translate to text. But hey, you aren't to blame for my imaginative suck- and I love the dialogue that comes straight after it.

Assuming you'd still be interested in editing this one, the references to how buff Damian are seemed a little fanservicy to me and could probably be conveyed in a more subtle way. :)

"You smell like us" is great.

I do wish you'd elaborated on Emily's "small breakdown" in the restroom. :)

I lol'd at Carl's "damn I'm good!" at his own corniness. Nice bit of characterisation there :D

Again, the ending would probably play out better as a visual/aural medium, but as it stands, it's still lovely writing and again, I find myself wanting more.

Very enjoyable read. Thank you for writing it! xx

(he congratulated himself) is a great aside and really makes your introductory paragraph stand out. I thought you could have, again, described a bit more keenly, but this chapter is again nice and fluffy, and you really have mad dialogue skills.

The dopey lovestruck comments about their duet are adorable, and the skipping is a great touch. :)

Keep in mind: I have only an extremely vague idea of who these people are, so I can't comment on characterisation :p

This is lovely and fluffy and light, and a really enjoyable thing to read- it flows well and your dialogue feels authentic and natural.

I've read some of your later fics, and I thought that here your descriptions could be amped up a little, because I know you're damn good at it once you get going :D I can't really see "pretty, dark-haired"- is there some other more unusual way of describing Emily? Also, "Damian was clearly stunned" and Samuel knows it, but what does he see that tips him off?

Sam is an interesting character. I can see why Emily has to tell him he's not a pimp, and I like that line because it has real bite to it. Since I don't know what exactly is going on at this point, I wonder to myself a) whether to believe Emily and b) why Sam seems to think he's a pimp, or acting like one.

I do this with everyone and have probably already done it to you: all right is two words :) I love Emily's gesture of instinctively raising her hands to her face, though. That's a lovely and intuitive touch from you there.

"Bryce and I decided you needed to get laid"- makes Sam sound, well, kinda like a pimp. But I don't mean that in a disgusted way; I can just see that he knows what he's doing may not be quite on the level, even though Emily is willing.

Nice hook for the ending. Enjoyed reading this chapter :)

Well, that was a cute ending! I loved the developing relationship between Emily and Damian, and I'm glad that their duet went well. The only somewhat jarring error was this: "He looks a little bit like that new boy on Glee." should end with a quotation mark. Other than that, it was excellently done. Great work.

I really like the snappy dialogue and the chemistry between Damian and Emily here. I'm also enjoying the way that their feelings for one another are developing. There seems to be some conflict developing because of the performance. The dialogue is realistic and fit the characters. Great job.

This was witty and quite well-done, especially since I've become quite warm towards Damily because of your stories. The characters are well-written and their relationships believable. The use of texting and slang adds realism to it. I'm interested to see where their romance will lead them. :)