You wrote one hell of a story! It was awesome! I would have liked to have enjoyed reading about Mycroft punishing Predator, though. Strictly from a revenge stance; he had it coming.

English isn't your first language? Well, this was pretty darned impressive already. I know that I wouldn't be able to write a cohesive story in another language, much less have it turn out nearly as well.

I hope you're still writing.

This was heart-breaking. I almost wish I hadn't read this. I kept the naive hope that everything would be back to normal, I still hope it will be. But experiences change people, and the most bitter ones change us the most. No matter how much we try to forget them.

I've been highly disturbed, very moved and incredibly happy a number of times upon reading fan stories. This is the first time I've cried.

Ok this story was really good for the most part but in several spots Sherlock and John were so out of character. First off when John said that if Sherlock started using again he would leave. It's a major part of John's dynamic to like Sherlock unconditionally. He would never leave no matter what Sherlock ever did, it just wouldn't happen. Second when Sherlock was questioning Jack's motives in the cellar. How could you do this to an innocent stranger? Why? Sherlock is a bit of a social dunce but if there is one demographic he understands it's criminals. He understands boredom and why people hurt people. I don't think he would have any problem with Jack's motives. And also I don't think that under any amount of emotional distress that Sherlock would ever threaten John. That's another thing that is too true to his character to ever reverse. Other than these and a few other instances I really did enjoy the story. Good descriptions and time line. Fantastic Job. :)

Loved this! Thanks for writing! -

I was nearly in tears throughout half of this story. It was EXCELLENT! You did an awesome job!

Very dark, but I like the ending. Sherlock get's saved :)

Ewwww the cock sucking bit was a bit 2 far... Mind u wen I read a book or fanfic I have visuals wen I'm reading,like a movie ... I just can't get it out of my head... Ruined my sunday... Never mind I'll keep on reading ... I'm tramatised...

I suppose the story wasn't bad, but I found it lacking in certain, very important, aspects. First of all, the characters didn't feel real, I can't find any logical faults in the killers description, but then again as far as crazy and psychothis characters go - one will not make himself strive to understand the depth of a character that simply does not have to have it. It's an OC, mentally ill at that, so the expectations are not high. But when I come looking for fan made stories I at least expect the original charecters to resemble themselves in the way of thinking or behaving. A blonde John liking tea is not exactly John Watson, there's a lot of Johns like that out there. What I mean is that the characters were veeeeeery shallow in the way of behaving and thinking. Let's start with Sarah - I understand that she was meant to act as a distraction for John, but she ended up as a whining, self-centered girlie, not compassionate at all, for god's sake! That woman is a doctor, she ought to have a habit, an instinct that makes her worry for a well-being of any person, not dismissing left and right that somebody dealing with criminals goes missing. And having the gal to ba mad that somebody else is giving a shit for a person thay're living with. And Greg? That's ridiculous. Acting all angry for being ignored? Ok, not usual, but acceptable. But he's a DI, the first thing they do, when dealing with a serial killer, is trying to depict a type of person that is probably going to be attacked. A victim portrait of sort. The very first thing he should have thought of is that they resemble somebody he cannot get in contact with, they practically looked the same. You write he was tired, that's not his first case like this, should be used to dealing under stress. Mycroft is just plain wrong. Stopped by bad traffic of all things?! Him? A guy who can turn cameras on the street the way he pleases?And waiting to give John address instead of rushing without delay to save his sibling that he is monitoring most of the time?When he knows he's being tortured? Doesn't know where he is for weeks and waits for John to start acting ? Zero logic. But most of all no feelings, or at least so shallow you get the impression you read about emotionless puppets in a show. They know they're supposed to act in certain way and express it, but for the life of them they only get to wave their arms around. A puppet is no actor, cannot have or fake emotions, and I certainly felt that I was reading about puppets that don't have and don't understand emotion.

Wow, this was really amazing! You're a brilliant writer

OMFG. This is sickening, hurtful, dark, barbaric, monstrous, disgusting, awful...
and beautiful.

I was listening to Snow White Queen by Evanescence when I first started this story, and I almost made myself sick.

I've had it on repeat ever since.

I just...I don't know what I should say. Other than well done. When you have an imagination this big and you can create things this dark with just a hint of light, you know you're a writer.

Authors who can make me sick are my favorites, because they know what to write and how to write it. You...you have me stuck. I have new standards for excellence.

You, my friend, are a genius.

I e-hug you.

Whilst sobbing in to your shoulder.

Love the story - keep going!

THat is a truely magnificent piece. Beautifully done. Very much looking forward to reading more of your pieces. Thank you so much for sharing.

Thanks for the chapter !

I have really enjoyed this story. It was well written andintense. I look forward to reading more from you.