The fact that this was your first fanfic makes me so jealous. This is seriously very impressive. I'm a big fan of your other works, especially "Dreams", so it's interesting to see your first one. Quite realistic as to what could've happened when Roy actually burned her back.

You go!

Beautiful. Really good!

That was just beautiful. Well done

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Welcome to the community, it looks like you'll be a great additon, by the looks of your style, and how you handled the characters.

Just a tip, don't forget the disclaimer, the suits can't reach you then!