What I'm getting at, is IF you've already seen this person in your memories, you should probably INSTANTLY make the connection, and if they are in your MIND (which he and kyuubi already know) then you shouldn't question reality, that's already out the window... SO don't act dumb...

You know it should get OLD for kyuubi and naruto to ask.. "aren't you supposed to be deceased, how are you here", MADARA, (not really him), The sage, minato, kushina, kyuubi, at this point it should really be a line of questioning they should just throw away (cuz it's KINDA POINTLESS) (then later with basically EVERYONE coming back still not sure how that works in the series' FAVOR, sounds like a DESPERATE author that wrote himself into a CORNER)

Oh come on! They mentioned cole BY NAME not even 30 seconds before you have him show up and then spend 11 paragraphs playing "who am I"? How stupid is that? I get that naruto might not be the brightest light bulb in the pack... BUT NOBODY IS THAT DUMB! Does he forget who he is, every morning as well?

I dunno why naruto would even be SURPRISED with cole showing up, I mean kyuubi is SUPPOSED to be dead, it's there, naruto's MOM AND DAD are dead, they are ALSO in the seal waiting for the right "dramatic moment" to show up. Then there is the sage's kid, Ashura who is also kicking around in there.. AND the sage himself. So yeah naruto really shouldn't be really freaked by ANYONE showing up. (kid has got more "voices" in his head then a SEVERE schizophrenic, only they are all REAL)

Actually since the fourth said that naruto should be considered a hero to the third(his subordinate at the time), then it COULD be considered NOT a request or what he WANTED, but actually as a "final ORDER"! In which case the third and everyone else is guilty of: treason, insubordination, disobeying a direct order, and a whole LITANY of other CRIMES!

"the road only gets tougher now that you're a ninja"? What? Teammates that don't like you (and you don't like) classmates, A teacher who won't teach you anything and doesn't think your worth anything school and professional career, Supposed "allies" that you should be able to trust but probably SHOULDN'T. Enemies that are trying to kill you all the time and hate you the entire village worth of people (probably including his instructor AGAIN) Doesn't seem ANYTHING gets "tougher" just sounds like "same shit, different day" in his life.

Great

I hope you can update soon.

Even if today is year 2018 i keep the Hope that you Will continue this story.

(Pls continúe this story almost no one reminds infamous)

My power would be the manipulation of matter. It's limitations would be my own mind. The only way to manipulate matter a certain way is if I know how matter behaves at certain stages. Like turning water to ice I would need to understand how water molecules lose energy in order to freeze them. Or if I wanted to go into manipulating plant life I would need to understand how plants are made, how their cells reproduce and repair themselves, how they receive energy and so on.

Unless I was a major in college grade sciences my power would be somewhat limited but has the most potential to grow. I think it's a perfectly reasonable power to have considering I wouldn't be capable of realistically leeching power from my environment like Cole or delson. Because of my power's raw versatility I would need to eat and sleep a lot more than the average human to power my abilities. The more functions I branch off with my powers the more energy I expend. So if i were to attempt something like nuclear fission it would kill me from overexhausting myself without a ridiculous amount of preparation.

Theoretically I could attach myself to an improvised feeding tube and speed up my bodies natural processes with my power in order to be capable of using a wider variety of abilities.

Realistically speaking I wouldn't be able to become an element because I'm using my own understanding of said element to manipulate it but it's not a part of me so unless I could study what makes a conduit a conduit and understand what gives an elemental such ridiculous control over said element I would have no chance of becoming an element like smoke or concrete.

I like the story so far but I'm really hoping you pair naruto with an oc. Like I've said with just about everyone I've had similar talks with. I have no hate for hinata but realistically hinata and naruto should have never became an item in canon. They had very minute interaction outside of movies and even those weren't all that long. The closest thing to relationship progression was that moment where Naruto accidentally peeked on hinata dancing on a lake surface.

But going into fanon, this story has had only one inclination of relationship building, which was when Naruto actually realized Hinata had a crush on him in the first place. I understand you haven't revealed anything in the story until the viewers come to p with a response but I think that's the wrong way to go.

Ive done something similar before and my story suffered because of it. It messes with the plot. No matter what other authors say, the pairing is a really important part of any story that has one. The person you set the character up with has to be capable of helping drive your protagonist the way you see him going. I don't see hinata doing that in this fic. In canon Naruto relies heavily on his friends and the bonds he's forged since he became a ninja to grow into the shining beacon of hope that shinobi world sees him as.

Hinata wasn't there for him when he needed her the most during his childhood, she wasn't there for him when Jiraiya died, she wasn't there during 95 percent of his shinobi career to support him in all of his achievements. Canon Naruto would have been more likely getting together with Ayame, this is not my preference for the pairing talking either, simply because she was there to listen to him after every single glee one of his wins and defeats. Heck, she would have tried to be there for him after Jiraiya died if she had known where he was. All I'm saying is shame has them ost claim over Naruto's heart out of every single girl in the naruto world, even sakura. The way I see it Hinata has the least. And the whole opposite attract thing is complete bullshit.

Opposites may attract, but just because chemistry can be seen between two people doesn't mean they belong together. Like mixing pure oxygen with aluminum powder? I'll go ahead and tell you what happens when it mixes, it creates a packed and ready pile of THERMITE! The Naru/hi a pairing isn't that dangerous but it wouldn't last. Hinata would eventually get sick of being the weak link in the relationship and no matter how much Naruto tries the two would eventually drift apart and if the two were still officially together one of them would inevitably cheat on their partner.

I hate to be the bearer of bad news but it's an unfortunate truth. If two personalities are complete opposites their doomed from the start to end in 1 of 3 ways, explosively with a lot of shouting and screaming, silently and torturous, drifting apart until the two end up hurt by the other, or, my least favorite, with one of the two being abused and forced to stay in the relationship.

If your not going to do an oc and your not willing to try using another character then just not have a pairing. I actually like Hinata's character but a relationship with her is just not healthy for someone as outgoing and bombastic as Naruto.

ya when u start up the game or is he just relaxing?

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u a lazy ass writer u supposed to explain dip shit

please dont let it be that mako is kushinas bastard child and that she got raped, because that would piss me off, maybe make him kushinas sisters child and A took him in after she died

I like the story but there is one thing that really bugs me, instead of Sasuke you write Sauske. I hope you can change this.