This story is great!

This is a really good fanfiction, you should right more of these, they really inspired my friend Adam, who will now buy an octopus to fuck his arsehole with. Jokes, im an octopus, i have the skills to fuck a mans arsehole. This is not disturbing in any kind of way, they should show this to 9 year olds who are just learning about sex and taboos. This is a great example. Adam is completely fascinated. He keeps talking and thinking about the tentacles and how he wants to get penetrated by Yogg-Sarron.

All very nice..

I was jacking it to both your stories and I didn't realize it, Tsunade's lemonade I enjoy. But this world of warcraft one is great as well.

Even though this is old it still turns me on every time I read it

i came

These stories are to good

hi!

Absolutely brilliant in all aspects - makes you very horny :)

some

Great job capping the flag, how did you so it?

I dont want to talk about it...

I like the idea for this story, but I found having the first chapter be entirely a biography to be a huge turn off. You should show your readers the characters stats within the story, because part of the fun of reading stories is discovering things about characters. If a reader already knows these things, then there's no reason to continue reading. On the other hand, I think having such a list is a huge benifit to you, the author, because it will help you keep character's facts straight. Please continue writing; I think you've got a good thing started!

You spelt areola wrong.

PS

I bet a whole bunch of pervs jack off to your story!

please update soon

And you said you were busy. Sorry, reviewing now.

Wonderfully done, unbelievable in the best ways. I like how she pretty much let him down genitally, didn't string him along. Many would just tell him whatever so get more banging, or to get him more invigorated, or be to good natured and lie to him. They'll have fun, that's what matters. She knows what she wants, and tries to make everyone involved happy. Am happy she refused the camels, no idea what that would even appeal to her. There is a future for them, not one of a family but one of friendship and such.

Now to point out the flaws. As a review I have to, sorry. You have a good number of misplaced or missing words. That's it, short of making it twice as long with twice as much 'fun'. But that's given with any story. Very well done.