I'm not a huge stickler for grammar or word play, but if I keep seeing the word "soon" every 2 lines I am going to have an aneurysm! Other than that the story is interesting so far, if not a little ganeric. There have only been a couple of incorrect assumptions about cannon material, but nothing that can't be brushed off. I do hope the quality of the English improves so I can continue to enjoy the story that KG wants to share.

what do you mean the fight is in the back of the compound? didn't they agree before to do it in the arena with the hokage present?

tbh feel like Naruto is actually underpowered, with as much chakra as he has he should last waaaay longer at least for his stamina. yeah I get those jutsu are really draining but this is an uzumaki were talking about

Yeah... I know this is a fanfic and all and some character personalities may or may not change but for a clan head to simply gamble on someone there supposed to love proves that said character does not love them. that has caused me to drop this fanfic that you are supposedly so proud of about tsume/naruto and you have failed.

i just realized i dont really like sasuke bashing which is weird because i love sakura and council bashing but i prefer the few fics where their friends from the start

ok fanfiction writers get this straight sakuras moms name is mebuki and shes blonde so stop givving her names like sakuno also she probably wouldnt hate naruto she was a retired shinobi it infuriates me so much use her real name and hair color or do some research beforehand

this has nothing to do with the story but is funny to me one of the ways to get a rinnegan is to beome jinchurikki ten tails but the only way to do that is with six paths ten tails coffin seal witch is a rinnegan exclusive abilty so basically one of the only ways to get a rinnegan is to already have a rinnegan

technically the byakugan isnt activated through stress the hyuga are born with it then train to activate it the only hyuga to activate through emotions thats been seen is hanabi when boruto ripped her bunny

banshee vs the all mighty uchiha

Several Jutsu and he is almost out of chakra?! Are you F*CKING KIDDING ME! Naruto is supposed to have several time more chakra than Jounin at this time of the story maybe even Hokage level! Why would he be almost out of chakra after just a match with Kankuro?! That's stup1d! In the original the reason why he tired easily was because of his extremely poor chakra control which he always waste when using jutsus that's all! However in this story he's been trained by Kyuubi in all shinobi traits since he was 6! It's just STUP1D!

Why did you label this story complete? Bloody liar. I love your work but I hate your wishy-washy bullshit in that you never really finish a story. Why do you even bother? You come up with awesome ideas, but you always fail to deliver. Why can't you actually finish a story for a change? I HATE authors who specialize in unfinished, yet awesome, stories. Authors like you deserve to have their reproductive organs rot in ways that make lepra seem like a kind blessing while your loved ones slowly burn in the fires of Amatarasu before your eyes as you die.

Commit damn it! If you don't plan on finishing your story, don't bother posting it and kill yourself with a rusty spoon. People like you make me ridiculously angry. If you do decide to kill yourself, please post a Youtube link of your messy and hopefully painful suicide to redeem yourself. I'll even mail a bag of shit for your family to ritualistically smear over your grave while they wail about you failing at existence so badly THEY want to kill themselves due to the shame of even knowing you let alone being related.

To sum it up; You suck, but not in a good way! Kill yourself on a webcam recording so we can all enjoy it.

Isnt he fucking 9 yrs old what typa nigga would do that

el mejor capitulo que leí en mucho tiempo

perdiendo el tiempo naruto no va ha entrenar nada estos 2 años

sasuke es un riesgo de fuga desde el principio i no es apto para el servicio shinobi mentalmente inestable me explicas por que no esta muerto aun cuando namas es una escoria que merce morir