There's a sentence that is really awkward. And of course, it's a risqué one at that.

"He pulled his hand out and watched her shudder violently as her own self rivered out of her." Her own self rivered out of her? Rivered is not a real word (I think) and this sentence does not work at all. Flowed, poured, cascaded...etc. Any of those are better words to use. And her own self is very awkward wording. Maybe just use her essence. So the sentence would be "...violently as her essence..." It's just awkward the way it is. And it doesn't speak clearly about whether or not she had an orgasm.

Loved it!

luved it

this is good!

I really enjoyed it! The wife part was cute.

It was okay. I wouldn't have made it a ten year marriage though.