Paragraphs repeat!

If Izaya could find out where, "shinozuka," lived, how is he unable to find out that's actually Shizuo's address? I'm assuming he'd have had to hack his profile or computer to find his address since he didn't know anything about him. But if that were the case then surely he'd have discovered who shinozuka really was.

Finally this story seems to be getting good! I wonder what Izaya is going to do since the tables have turned and he's the one with a broken heart.

Very cute the way you write out Shiki's feelings for Izaya. For some reason, many fans write out Shiki and Izaya as having had a romantic relationship in the past. I'm not complaining, I love that headcannon. Lol. But it seems poor Izaya is often always overlooked in fan fiction with Shiki due to their age difference. That's okay though because we all know Izaya belongs to Shizuo!

I believe that Shiki doesn't refer to Izaya by his first name. He refers to him as, Orihara san. I also don't think that he would have let Izaya talk above him the way he did without getting a word in. Shiki is all about respect being given to guests, but he expects the same respect returned. Just an FYI.

There's not much dialogue in this, I've noticed. Just a lot of repetitive denial in Izaya's head and repetitive wondering about love in Shizuo's. Hope the dialogue improves as the story goes on.

Wow lol you sure made Izaya into a nutcase in your story. I always pictured him as cool, calm and collected. I get why you're making him lose it though..to portray that Shizuo is having an affect on him. I mean, I guess I kind of understand.

I think I'm just a lil wierded out with the repetitive wording.

Is Shizuo like on a gay dating site? Why are only men messaging him? And is he completely gay? I feel like there was no explanation on this just the brief statement that Shizuo didn't care finding love with a man. Just a lil confused with this.

Really good so far I really like how much you express izaya's personality but why did you repeat the same thing twice? Did you forget that you already wrote it lol

Finished reading this through for the second time and just gotta say I really adore your characterizations in here. One of the few fics where nothing really seems ooc much at all. It's really quite refreshing.

At first I wasn't sure about this fic, it seemed too wordy and round about...
But the more I read it now the more I like it. I like the word repetition, the emphasis, how you can feel the urgency. You can feel their agitation and torment.
I'm liking this more and more.

Izaya talking himself into this is like a tiny stab to my heart.

thank god that didn't happen...

wait, shiki is gonna rape izaya?

oh no no no...
that reminds me of the song Love Trials xD