It’s good I wish there was more to it though. I enjoyed it.

I understand why Luna reminded him of Dru, but for me Luna is more like River Tam.

Ah I get it! That's awesome!

Oh my. I read this knowing the Buffy universe only by reputation, and was duly pleased. Luna's best defense is-being Luna. Interesting how those with a different view of the world are so frequently suspected of having something odd in the bloodstream...

Cute and short, really enjoyed it. There's no completed but you said it was done at the end so yeah, great read.

Okay, I promised to write you a review - be amazed, public. I rarely do this.

Ahem.

Okay, you have some mistakes here and there, small ones that are easily corrected - I suggest doing what I do, if you don't have a beta-reader. Wait a few days before posting - and don't even LOOK at your story - and then re-read your draft, and pick out the mistakes.

If you aren't sure, go to a friend or, better yet, an English teacher or a librarian, and have them check your work. They usually know their stuff, and are very honest and helpful.

Mistakes:

[She was blond, almost as blond as her was] It should be "She was blond, almost as blond as -hers- (stress this for special emphasis, if you think it's needed) was"

Helpful Tip: 'hers' not 'her's'. Her's, while familiar and seemingly correct, ISN'T correct. I just double checked it, and hers is the correct spelling. No apostrophe. If you make this mistake, don't sweat it - I do it, too. A lot of people do, actually.

[He stopped his approach and stared at her, not fully conscious of what her was doing] Should be; "He stopped his approach and stared at her, not fully conscious of what -he- was doing". The 'her' in the sentence is a small mistake, but still distracting, and you end up loosing points with the reader.

To be honest, those are the only real 'mistakes' you made, the ones that kinda bothered me. They're very simple ones, but they're still distracting when you're reading.

I can't pick at your writing style - it's different than mine, and that makes it fantastic, trust me. But I have to resist the urge to be the Back Seat Writer, because it differs from my own style. Gah.

There's a difference between personal STYLE and honest MISTAKES. Your style grows and evolves as you grow as a writer, and it's something that you develop. I suggest reading and studying other people's works, and obverse their writing styles - how does this person arrange their words? Or, how does so-and-so make their story seem so vivid and real?

Learn from example. It's what I did, and STILL do. You'll be surprised by what you can learn from other people by simply reading what they've written. Monkey see, monkey do - but do it DIFFERENTLY. Don't copy people word for word - follow your own instincts as both a writer AND a reader.

Anyway; I honestly enjoyed this story. It was thought provoking - rather you intended that or not - and was really neat to read.

Thank you for posting In the Moonlight!

And I sincerely hope that I didn't screw this up. I never give out writing advice - so I don't know how this is going to end up - AND I'm sleep depraved. I need SLEEEEEP. But, well, you ASKED, personally, and nicely, and how can I just ignore that?

Feel free to ignore anything in this review that doesn't make sense or agree with you. I'm still sleepy, and only operating with 25 percent brain power here. Forgive me for any incoherency.

Hugs and Smiles,

Glasses.

sweet. reminds him of dru right?