great chap, seriously starting to wonder if liev is ever going to win a fight. anyhow looking forward to the next

Man, I JUST realized that you had updated this. I'm glad that you aren't giving up on this story; it's one of my favorites.

I'm definitely seeing improvement in your grammar, and I feel like your vocabulary has grown even more impressive. Though I noticed that you missed a few commas throughout the chapter, and in other cases, you joined two independent clauses with a comma, but without a conjunction. All in all, you've went through some fine improvement; those were just some flaws that I noticed.

I was laughing my ass off when Yael joined Liev in the back. I think she's even more oblivious than her father, hahah. I found the whole "part of his anatomy was very happy" especially hilarious. Have you ever read the manga Deadman Wonderland? Liev and Yael's odd relationship reminds me of Ganta and Shiro's in Deadman Wonderland. If you haven't read it already, I highly suggest that you do.

Anywho, I'm really looking forward to the next chapter, whenever you post it. Just know that I'll be following this story through every update. _

Let me say that I'm glad you're continuing to write this. You left at a point where it was difficult to tell wether it ended or just abandoned. I look forward to your next update

Thank you for updating! And I loved the bath scene... I was kind of expecting Rana and Aliesha to murder him for that but oh well more stuff for natsu to murder him for whenever you decide to do a 'meet the parents' episode or something.

Have you ended this story? It's hard to tell. It's a great story and it'll be a shame if its over

Ok I seriously can't tell if you mean ending the story ( I really hope not) or ARC I still want To see Liev meeting Natsu and Lucy. Ah the drama. Anyway great story!

Love how you're able to create such tense moments. I felt like a awful human being for laughing in the middle of it, on his last leg. Definitely love how you can set up the flow of the story.

Awesome! New chapter and some info on Liev's background! Sorry for the late review, but school is now officially over for me. On a different note, Wendy can only save a person from near death so any times. According to Wendy, if she uses her magic on people repeatedly, the effect tends to fade and not be as effective. Poor Natsu is going to have a hard time when this happens with his motion-sickness. So just keep that in mind for future near death fights.

Miu signing out.

Woo! Another update, and an action-packed one at that. This chapter leaves me with a couple of plot-related questions: what does the Second know about Liev's parents; what was Yael going to say? I have a feeling I know what the latter question revolves around, though.

On that note, I like how this Fanfic doesn't revolve around romance like a lot of the others cluttering up this site. Yet you add in subtle hints occasionally. To me, that's the preferable way of building up romance.

Liev has just been getting battered around lately, eh? As soon as he leaves the hospital, he gets forced back in in an even more severe condition than previously. For some reason, I can see this Fanfic ending badly for him. I can also picture a decent-enough ending for him as well. Not a good one that lacks strife, but a decent one.

One consistent grammar error I've noticed is your use of punctuation when it concerns quotations. Ex:

"Blah blah blah blah" Liev growled.

Or:

"Blah, blah blah blah blah." Nael argued.

In the former case, you'd forget a comma before the end quotation. In the latter case, the period prior to the end quotation should be replaced with a comma. The only time you would use a period is if you aren't saying 'says Liev' or something along those lines. In other words, usually when a conversation is being carried between two and only two people:

"You are so immature," says Simone.

"Am not," snapped Mark.

"Are too."

"Nuh-uh."

"Uh-huh."

So you typically use periods in place of commas when you figure the reader can perceive who is currently speaking.

Other than that error, nothing really stands out to me. Keep up the good work. :)

It was a great chapter. I'm really liking where this story is going. Ein is certainly an interesting character, but I thought he would be able to have a small fight against Gildartz.

Here's something I think will be useful: when you are calling someone in a sentence like this: Get over here Liev, you should add a comma before Liev. Same goes for something like this: Liev, get over here.

Great chapter and I hope to see more soon.

Sorry...

When ever I posted a review about how one part needed a little tweak or it could have used some re-reading, I got angry PMs so I stopped posting those... But the story really is good. I really enjoy reading it.

As for your villain, Ein Malizer. I like him a lot. The "uncool antagonist" is not seen often in the stories on this site. If there are quite a few of them, then forgive me because I have not read any. I look forward to reading more about him.

Thanks for the mention. It means a lot.

The chapter was fine, although I was confused on how Davis came back. I might have skipped something within the chapter, but I saw that Davis was "dead" in the other chapter, and then he comes back in the middle of this chapter. If I did miss it, try to make it, more obvious on how Davis came back.

I can definitely see the story moving a lot faster from this chapter.

I can see your point on your "cool story bro" reviews. I also recommend the story, "Roar of the Water Dragon" just to see how badly we need serious reviewers in this fandom. I will never understand how a badly written story manages to get 60 reviews.

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Another brilliant chapter. I think that sums it up.

However, I have always wondered something. Is there any sort of inflation in this world? 500,000 jewels per job? I assume bread would cost around 2000 or 3000 jewels at that rate and the average working man earns around...100,000 jewels? Or it could be like the German inflation and bbread costing around 500,000 jewels, (which is completely unrealistic).

The story is coming along very well. It is a bit sad that you won't be updating regularly, but that is the price I pay for reading a good story. Also, I have a favor to ask of you. It would be great if you could review my brother's story, Rise of the Phantom Lord and give criticism and possible praise for what he has written as his first full on canon work.

Keep up the good work! CleanUp

Now this was a good chapter. I didn't realize that Abhainn was a female so sorry if I referred to her as a male. A male fairy really doesn't make sense...

Anyways, was Mavis really a fairy? She certainly doesn't look like one.

Not much to say besides the fact that this story is shaping up to be a very polished story. Usually second generation stories are terrible, but this one I can read and enjoy.

This story deserves a favorite. CleanUp

Abhainn is a pretty interesting character. I believe every series needs a character like him.

The chapter was fine from what I saw. Grammar and spelling seem to be no problem for you.

But I found one thing that could have been better. The fight against Ginrei could have been longer. You took the time to set his character up, create a great description for him, and describe him well, so why not make his fight longer?

I also have to thank you. It's rare to meet someone so willing to accept constructive criticism. I usually encounter authors who get angry when I point something out that doesn't make sense.

CleanUp