Reaching the end I must say that it was good, but not that good. It began Strong, you had one of the best renditions of the ferris wheel scene, I'm glad that you took the realistic route. However, after that the fic started to get messy. Black turned into Hugh, but less likeable and the end didn't even finish his character arc; I was expecting, to tell the truth, that you had pulled a twist and made him Reshiram's chosen one, it would go against a lot of clichés. N's descent into full villany was interesting to see, to tell the truth, even if I get mixed feelings, like what if White had learned that N could have freed her in the cave earlier? But the fic had good moments.

"...you obviously need me to protect you..." This was funny because I can imagine the amount of self-control that White had to not punch N in the face.

OK, best ferriswheel shipping fic ever. And I've read a lot! Ghestis' end, the clumaxm M's moment if truth, his adorable innocence, it was all perfect! I don't care if you wrote this in 2012, I want a seueeeeeel! The only thing I would have/added was a better wrap up for White and Blacks relationship, but other then that, perfection!

Well, I just done did almost cried!

Gosh, this chapter stuffed me with feels! It was almostoo much for me!

First chapter and already I am hooked on it! Keep up the good work :)

This is absolutely amazing. I'm so speechless... I think this is the best story i've read involving these two.

yes it could be worse...
N could be a yandere.

I really like Oshawott's personality. And N's.

... *clap* *clap clap clap* ** THIS IS BEAUTIFUL. THIS IS ABSOLUTELY BEAUTIFUL. I WAS LEGIT BAWLING AT THE END. I need a hug now...

Alright, now that that's out, let's get serious. White's transition from being lovestruck to loveless about N was a bit too fast and sudden. Maybe a chapter of her just breaking down? It could easily be made interesting with Black's brotherness trying to make her happy while still keeping her away from N, and with N's point of veiw you could have the Shadow Triad reporting on White's whereabouts and situation. There were one or two spelling and grammar mistakes, but those are really easy to overlook.

The characters are well-rounded and stayed in character throughout most of the story. The plot was detailed and captivating, and for the most part original. You have earned this story a favorite, you wonderful writer, you!

AMAZING FOR YOUR FIRST FANFIC!

Well done, though you might want to mark this Complete on your Manage Stories tab after logging in...

This story is awesome!

U should make an epilogue but over all it was good I think u should write an epilogue

awemazing beutiful work