Nice story but it’s weird that one of them introduced the other two as females to a stranger, the shadow triad are mysterious and reserved characters so it’s odd and unusual for them to create a team based on theirselves, and there should be fewer main characters to make it more interesting

I got the game black two...Not as entertaining as the internet...

I wanna be in the story so baaaaaad!

I hate her watchog to. 6 times for me.

Nice story so far. I can't wait to read more.

I really love this book! If only there where gymleaders from other regions like Volkner,Falkner,Brock, and all that good stuff! See ya later!

Hi Landon!You have the same name as my BFF

Long time no see! It's okay. Some of us writers take really long to update, including me! Anyway, I'm so happy to see this updated again. Good luck! :)
Yeah, I got a riolu. :)
And I completely understand your rant.

-Mii-Chan (previously WritingMage08)

So the one who fails the gym is either Felix, Kyo, Valerie, or Lucas... I'm gonna guess Felix, just as a hunch. Maybe Vikkiy would get a little downcast at that or SOMETHING, I don't really know.

Iris has to be the youngest champ ever. Even Red was older.

My best guess is that Cheren gave up on his search for power and realized that it isn't all about power... idk really.

RIOLU?! NO WAYYY! :D I bet this is also the first game where you can find wild eevees, like seriously. You always have to get them from Bill or Bebe or whoever. I like that 'cause my favorite pokemon is umbreon. Lucario is close. But what made me really happy was that mareeps will be in it. I have a thing for ampharii :D

Elesa ruined her look. She looked way better before, and I SO preferred her old headphones. The new ones look like squirrel ears.

Not a bad chapter, although when trying to include every character, every character seems to be losing personality. Just a little. Smaller groups help it, like in this chapter's second bit.

See ya in a bit :) And glad your life troubles are over right now :D

asfdgjhfgdkhgjfhfgdf yeessss! Finally omg I just can't express the feels of happiness I just rawr :33

Sorry for the coherency; I am just so excited to see it updated again! Nyaa, I loved this chapter (YES! FREE FOOD FOR LO!) and... I don't know, I just loved everything about it, it's so hard so explain I just asdgfhgkjhgdfsdfdfghhjkgfhdg sf

... yes, I am a tumblr user, in case you couldn't tell .;;

Can't wait to see the next one

New chapter! Considering I've read this over so many times while it was being written, and that I (sortof) edited it, I still love it. XD While part of me is just going "AndyAndyAndyyou'redoingsuchagoodjobwithher", I'm also just really in love with this whole story. While I do actually know what's coming for everyone, I still am really pumped to see what everyone else thinks. :P

Loved it. Loveditloveditlovedit. So glad you're back. I missed Felix and Vikkiy's bickering.

Can't wait for the next chapter

Yay, new chapter! I'm so excited to see it up! And don't worry... I tend to take a while updating my story, too...

In any case, I've noticed, Kyo seems to be the keenest when it comes to avoid disaster. Must be because he's spent so much time with Vikkiy, he's become rather savvy on what can go wrong with her groups...

So, yay, Castellia City Gym! ...Kyo's got an advantage here as well... hm... Oh, well. Can't wait to read the next chapter when you make it!

I enjoy this chapter. I liked that Lucas won a badge there. :D I liked that a lot. So many funny things happened in one chapter. I enjoyed it so much. Keep it up.

Well, time to review... I'll try to be more in-depth this review...

So, first battle, Kyo and Vikkiy work well, I see... and it seems like that Joltik is much more dangerous then it would appear. At least they had no casualties. And then poor (lucky?) Kyo gets tackle-hugged by Vikkiy, and Felix potentially calls her fat... oh, boy...

So Lucas has got to go in place of Felix and Toby... he actually did pretty good in this match... the burn probably helped with defeating Herdier...

So, Kyo finally gives Vikkiy her badge (and she blushes. D'aw), and then we get to see Toby and Felix battle. They did pretty good, all things considered, but they seemed less coordinated then Vikkiy and Kyo. Oh, well... on to Castellia!

Well, in the Author Notes, I noticed what you said on Watchog's moves. It actually knows Crunch, Retaliate, Leer, and Hypnosis. But that's beside the point.

Anyway, good chapter. I can't wait for the next one!