You are listed under the wrong character tag of Hawke (M) that is for the male Hawkes not the female ones. Change it asap, please. This isn't a new change either, you know. Now it's almost 2 months ago that they separated the F!Hawke from M!Hawke. For a good reason too.

This is very very good! I didn't think it could be done, putting Dragon Age 2 characters in a modern urban setting, but you have pulled it off rather flawlessly . You stay true to the characters but still somehow manage to take them out of the medieval fantasy setting. On top of which you have fleshed them out and given them distinct personalities that match their background. The dialogue runs as smoothly the battle scenes if not better . And its always nice to see correct grammar usage and spelling. Its not rushed but the story line moves right along without a hiccup. your humor is light and always in the right spot , never heavy handed or overdone. I have to say I'm very impressed . You even mange to bring in some in game dialogue without depending heavily on it . All in all this is a very welcome breath of fresh air in a genre that can get boring and stale very quickly. I'm eagerly looking forward to your next few chapters

Well, you know where I stand on your fics. :P And you know that I adore this insanely, though for the life of me, I can't understand why YOU don't.

It's good, but we might have to work on your ~emotions~ XD How very English of you. :P jk ilu don't kill me.

Okay so FF was being a bitch and not letting me review AGAIN, so I'm using my massively old ass account. (You are not allowed to laugh/read/go anywhere near my old stories. :( So don't even think about it.) Here is there 'critical' review you wanted. Please don't kill me/hate me/resent me I LOVE YOU! D:

I'd prefer there to be more descriptions, more thoughts about things. Like Aveline, for example.

Why would she ALWAYS volunteer to be the designated driver? Surely they've asked her this before?

I want moar descriptions pertaining to the massive hangover Hawke is having! :D Because I'm LIKE THAT.

'Bethany laughed again, and it only increased the pounding of her brain once more.' - I thought this would be funny to add. "A niggling feeling in Hawke's gut told her that her sister might be laughing just a little bit louder than usual." Meh *shrugs*

This sounds a tad bit too...direct.

It's mostly actions and reactions,and not much thought or contemplation with it. Like shouldn't Hawke be curious as to what Varric wanted from her that was so urgent.

I feel like a total scunner if I repeat this, but - I like descriptions. :/ It makes me feel better about my writing.

Methinks the last sentence of the chapter might need a bit of fixing - some etcetera etcetera about 'connections' and 'heat of his gaze'and what-have-yous, to give Hawke a reason to maintain/release eye contact with the smexy Fenris.

First of all.

I LOVE IT. I LOVE IT I LOVE IT I LOVE IT.

Second of all - I don't know why you were so damn hesitant to wanna post this. THIS IS QUALITY.

Fenris is just hnggg, Hawke and the gang are just UNF. Write MORE.