this is very good. the way the paragraphs are divided is masterfully done

Beautiful. I have no other words.

I really liked this. The processing of Stoick's thoughts was well thought out and written, and none of the characters were OOC. Wonderful job :3

Very well written, in-character one-shot. Well don!

Good job writing Stoick. You did well on his internal monologue.

The mark of a good author - when the reader doesn't know what they liked about your story, they enjoyed reading it.

What an awesome story. I like that you forwent verbal interaction between the two. I noticed that you liked to add extra describing words a few times, with a character like Stoic, sometimes less description is more, even in the narration. You managed to do a good job of most of it, but it could use a little more polishing.

This sure was a good one-shot, i was wondering about something though, is it okay that i take the tilte on your story on my list that i have to a grup that writen dragon storys? We really need some good ones and i am sure the members would love to hear this one.

I really liked it and think that you did a great job with the description of the characters and the minimal amount of dialog.

Very well done. I liked the idea that Stoic would try to get along with Toothless for Hiccup's sake. It was obvious in the movie that Stoic loved his son, but they just could not relate to one another. This story showed very nicely that Stoic is now trying to bridge the gap between himself and Hiccup. I also liked the descriptions of Toothless.

This was so good! Stoick is a complicated character, I applaud you for even attempting such a feat, because heaven knows it is HARD. I was surprised to see how few stories there are on this site that are Stoick/Toothless based, but this is probably one of my favorite. You captured them both so beautifully, and your writing style is absolutely gorgeous. Thank so much for posting!

This was amazing, especially for a character that really, had fairly little screen time. Writing so well from Stoic had to be difficult. I simply adored how you portrayed Stoic and Toothless.

I love this! You did an excellent job with how toothless communicates. I always thought the transition to excepting dragons wouldn't be so easy at first, and that especially Stoick would have problems. I really like how you showed us that, wonderful job!

~Shrine

I gotta say I liked this- the introspection was very well done and the scenes were described in a great way. Points such as "the last time he had been in such a position" added a lot in linking this situation to Stoick's mind-set, IMHO. I like the physical descriptions as well- the way the dragon feels, as a difference to what he had done previously in his life.

A small point I might mention is use of some of the vocab seemed a bit distracting: I think the use of kinesics is useful in illustrating the motion of the dragon (following the point in the way a dog would not), but (arguably) atramentous seems somewhat obscure.

Very nice one-shot, and I've enjoyed your other stories as well

Cheers, T.

Very impressive. I have pictured a scene like this one playing out ever since I watched the movie. It was very moving in showing how difficult this is for Stoic to come to grips with.

Thank you.