wow

...this story is so sad! i feel so bad for both of them, now i really hate bella! ella and him would have been perfect. i wish the story would continue and ella would be changed into a vampire so edward and her could be together...wow they even have the alliterations going on; edward and ella lol i just noticed the similarity between ella and bella lol i love this story, definitely going to be rereading this! :D

awwwwwwwww! this is so cute! more! i want to see their first kiss! i like how you kept edward the chicago gentlemen instead of having him swear every other word like some of the stories i've read. very in character, good job! i never really got what bellas appeal was but if you read midnight sun (the first 14 or so chapter of twilight from ed's point of view) then it explains what her appeal was, if ur curious. midnight sun is actually way better than twilight in my opinion, u get to see what goes on behind ed's head and behind the doors of their house as vampires too!

I like this.

The original character is a little Mary Sue-ish, but I don't think she's beyond hop; with a few changes she could be a well developed and rounded character worthy of your talent as a writer.

I love this! Update soon!

~WolfofFire

That was soooo depressing, but super good too!

I love this! It's pretty good so far! Please update soon!