Awwwwww! Please update soon! It would be nice if you do in Fang POV, but Max will do.

Who said oy!? PLZ UPDATE I am just gonna guess but was the "oy" from a flock member or eraser or ...?!

It's really nice :D I like :)

This is such a great story! It would be great if you did a Fang POV

Why is the ending
"Oy!"

ummmmmmmmmmmm... HELLO! WHY DID YOU LEAVE ME ON A CLIFFY!keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing keep writing. i hope that was extremely inspiring.

have you read ANGEL and if so did you hate it?

update please! Its a really good story.

Yo Victoria. Btw I must disagree with your self description. You are not fourteenish, whatever you might say, and you do not look like are more like fang, colour wise. So am I. And so is 90% of singapores population. I hate to think what your DAD would say if he read your fanfic. But I guess in the loosest terms, it's ok. The spelling andgrammr is ok, which are a fan fiction critiques primary concern. Plot is loose. Plot holes, darling! And also some mior OOC in the last chapter. If Max and Fang were to get into a roller coaster, they would probably die from claustrophobia befo even getting on the ride. Really. Also I seriously doubt fang would kiss max under those circumstances and in front of everyone else on the ride. Seriously. Text me or call me if you want a more specific yelling at. Warning, this is NOT a flame. I did not say your fanfic was worthless. It just needs some minor improvement. :)

Aweeeh FAXY! LOL! Please do Fangs POV :)

Amazing! So good pls continue

VICTORIA PHUA RUI QI! This is RIDICULOUS. I'm seriously picky about OOC. Minor problems in that department.

firstly, you CANNOT speed talk (maybe speedthink) during telepathic conversations.

I also think NO ONE under the sky woudl DARE call Max Maxie. I seriously doubts it

Also, fang DOES NOT BLUSh as far as i'm concerned. Fang is very CALM AND COLLECTED.

I promnised i would not flame. this is NOT a flame. it is constructive critisism. Call me L8r for more.

Jeanne

Omg this is soooo funny! I love the implied FAX that you have put into this! It is soooo sweet and makes me giggle from their hilarious obliviousness and Iggy and Gazzy's suggestive teasing. I can't wait to read more soooooooo UPDATE, UPDATE, UPDATE! :)

Aw! Cute! Update!

Please make the chapters longer other than that it's good