wow! nice job!

This was a good topic to write on. In shows you always have to assume what they're thinking, unless you hear it. Thanks for writing this!

Do you have a link I could use to watch the full show? Is it on Netflix?

I really like this! For one thing, I like how you showed the same scene from two different perspectives. For another, I can see them thinking and feeling this way. When I saw the Kim Possible movies years ago, I didn't think much about the characters' thoughts and emotions; but you really brought them to light.

Good job on this. I hope you'll write more for Kim Possible.

I liked this. These lines are my favorite, they're in-character and real: "I hadn't ever dared to hope, not with Ron. His friendship had meant way to much to me for me to risk it. But, maybe Ron felt the same way, and I had been pushing it to the side for years, telling myself I was just his hero best friend. I looked at him, his nerves still playing along his face, and let myself hope."

There were a few spelling/grammar mistakes: "anger" instead of "angry," "too" instead of "to" (and vise versa), "sounded" instead of "sounding". And a very often there were spaces between quotation marks and words.

Not bad not bad at all. Introspection into one's actions.

ST

And Ron's also were straight to the point and carried well, too.

CB73

And I think Shego is with one G... but that may come out in the re-edit...

Nice fill-in the blanks of what was running through Kim's mind at this moment.

Now to see to Ron's.

CB73

PS: Welcome to KP!