| Reviews for She Who Hesitates |
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L chapter 1 . 8/5/2019 It was an amazing story,but Luna lacked her absent-mindedness |
Aftermath Man chapter 1 . 7/1/2019 Great read! I have read this twice now and will most likely read it a few more times, I just wish there was more. |
Guest chapter 1 . 3/1/2019 Luna's birthday February 11th, 1971. Aquarius baby! |
fanreader18 chapter 1 . 1/12/2019 Nice one shot. |
poopy mc poopy chapter 1 . 1/8/2019 sexy sexy sexy sexy sexy to much sex sex sex sex sex |
Guest chapter 1 . 1/24/2017 So interesting an All time classic |
lol u don' need chapter 1 . 12/31/2016 great. |
pedrokotii chapter 1 . 12/10/2016 Wow. It was so sweet, I think i got diabetes. Nice work. And it was a plausible enough setting... |
Guest chapter 1 . 12/4/2016 London Knight. Really good & thoroughly enjoyed it . I actually lost my virginity in a similar way ... ;-) |
deadsnakebiting chapter 1 . 10/5/2016 What a lovely little story! It instantly became one of my favorites! Thank you for sharing it with us. John |
Dauntless Slytherin Tribute chapter 1 . 9/29/2016 Are you going to wright a sequel |
Marvolo666 chapter 1 . 9/29/2016 I always saw Luna as being born on valentines day |
Mysts of Time chapter 1 . 5/28/2016 A good story... But luna didn't seem like the luna I know. She seemed like a good character for him regardless, so... I'm just pretending she's an OC |
Stylo chapter 1 . 1/17/2016 Absolutely beautiful and honest. Luna and Harry are the best couple ever, and this fic really does them justice. I love how it's paced naturally - you actually let the couple take their time, the way they would in real life. So much better than all those fanfics that leap immediately from first kiss to full-on sex. If there's a "tasteful" way to write hot sex, this is it. And best of all, this isn't just about sex; there's actual emotional love mixed in as well. In short, I feel like I'm reading a real couple. The reason this story is so effective is because you've done an excellent job depicting the characters. I particularly like how many different sides of Luna we got to see. She's sweet, quirky, easygoing, and accepting, just like in the books - but you've also managed to bring even more out of her character. I love how she progresses from being cautious and uncertain to being more and more confident, and how she gradually starts taking charge during the makeout/sex scenes. And the way she holds her own during the argument at the end is a perfect conclusion. Some of the sentences explaining their feelings could have been pared down or removed (e.g., "She was stunned by her boldness, but she could tell Harry was very nervous and didn't want him to feel that she was angry at him about what had happened.") For your future writing, remember that you can convey a lot about what your characters are thinking just through dialogue and verb choice. Other than that, everything else about this fic is top-notch! And finally, I loved the use of "Merlin" and "Maeve" as wizard substitutions for God. Excellent touch. |
HBK96 chapter 1 . 10/15/2015 All i can say is wow. Words cannot convey my appreciation of your skills. Hats off. |